TOEFL TPO 27 Academic Discussion Writing Sample: Your professor is teaching a class on transportation. Write a post responding to the professor’s question.
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Doctor Diaz
Starting this week, we will discuss how public transportation is funded. Public transportation gives people from all social groups access to their homes, workplaces, and shopping. Some argue that public transportation should be supported by tax revenue so that all people could have free access to it. What do you think? Should public transportation be free to all? Why or why not?
Kelly
People already pay so much in taxes for things like schools, roads, and law enforcement. I don’t think that adding one more tax—especially when some people don’t even use public transportation—would be a good idea. People need money for other essentials for their families.
Paul
Free public transportation would result in having fewer cars on the roads. Also, it would mean cleaner air for the cities, and there are many health conditions that could be improved with cleaner air. I think the savings in health-care costs and less pollution would make it worth it.
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1用户样本 #1
In my opinion, public transport should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a constellation of factors.
Firstly, echoing Paul's idea, free public t...
用户样本 #1
In my opinion, public transport should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a constellation of factors. Firstly, echoing Paul's idea, free public t...
用户样本
In my opinion, public transport should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a constellation of factors. Firstly, echoing Paul's idea, free public transport can help to improve the natural and city environment. Free public transport reduces the reliance on private cars, which is the culprit of the burgeoning amount of carbon dioxide in the air. While free trains or buses give people the incentive to use public transport instead, allevitating the air pollution. Besides, congestion can be improved with fewer cars on the road. Secondly, free public transport can help to relieve the economic burden on the low-income family. As the low-income group rely mainly on the train or bus during daily commute, the free access can definely help them to save a significant amount of expenses.Hence, they can spend the money on other daily necessaries.
评估结果
1. Sub Scores
Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5 Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0 Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. Estimated Scores
Estimated Score: 27
3. Task completeness
The essay does a good job of addressing the task requirements by expressing an opinion and contributing to the discussion. However, there is room for improvement in terms of elaborating on the viewpoint and providing more specific examples or details to support the arguments. Additionally, while the language use is mostly accurate, there are some minor grammar issues that could be improved.
Suggestions for improvement:
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Provide more specific examples or details to support your arguments.
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Revise grammar and sentence structure for better clarity.
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Instead of just mentioning "low-income families," provide a specific example or statistic about how much money they could save with free public transportation.
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To improve grammar, revise the sentence "Free public transport can help to relieve the economic burden on the low-income family" to "Free public transportation can help relieve the economic burden on low-income families."
4. Essay structure and organization
The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body, and conclusion. The organization is logical, with each paragraph focusing on a specific point and supporting details. However, transitions between ideas could be improved for better flow.
Suggestions for improvement:
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Use clear transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
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Make sure each paragraph has a clear focus.
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Add a transition sentence at the beginning of your second paragraph like "In addition to environmental benefits,"
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Ensure that each paragraph has a clear focus by starting with a topic sentence such as "Another advantage of free public transportation is its potential impact on low-income families."
5. Grammar
In my opinion, public transport should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a constellation of factors.
Firstly, echoing Paul's idea, free public transport can help to improve the natural and city environment. Free public transport reduces the reliance on private cars, which is the culprit of the burgeoning amount of carbon dioxide in the air. While free trains or buses give people the incentive to use public transport instead, allevitatingalleviating(misspelling) the air pollution. Besides, congestion can be improved with fewer cars on the road.
Secondly, free public transport can help to relieve the economic burden on the low-income family. As the low-income group rely mainly on the train or bus during daily commute, the free access can definelydefined(misspelling) help them to save a significant amount of expenses.Hence Hence(Missing space between sentences), they can spend the money on other daily necessaries.
Display title: 6 Revised Essay
In my opinion, public transportation should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a multitude of factors.
Firstly, echoing Paul's perspective, free public transportation can contribute to improving both the natural and urban environment. By offering free access to trains and buses, people would be encouraged to utilize public transport instead of relying on private cars, which are responsible for the increasing levels of carbon dioxide emissions. Consequently, this would help alleviate air pollution and reduce traffic congestion in cities.
Secondly, free public transportation can alleviate the financial burden on low-income families. As these individuals primarily depend on trains and buses for their daily commutes, granting them free access would enable them to save a significant amount of money. This additional income could then be allocated towards other essential expenses, ultimately improving their overall quality of life. (142 words)
In my opinion, public transportation (transport changed to transportation for consistency in American English) should be supported by tax revenue, driven by a multitude of factors (constellation of factors. changed to multitude for clarity and simplicity).
Firstly, echoing Paul's idea, free perspective (idea changed to perspective for a more precise term), free public transportation can contribute to improving both the natural and urban environment (city environment changed to urban environment for better word choice). By offering free access to trains and buses, people would be encouraged to utilize public transport can help to improve the natural and city environment. Free public transport reduces the reliance instead of relying on private cars, which is the are responsible for the increasing levels of carbon dioxide emissions (culprit of the burgeoning amount of carbon dioxide in the air. While free trains or buses give people the incentive to use public transport instead, allevitating the air pollution. Besides, changed for clarity and conciseness). Consequently, this would help alleviate air pollution and reduce traffic congestion can be in cities (improved with fewer cars on the road. road changed for better flow).
Secondly, free public transport transportation can help to alleviate the financial burden on low-income families (relieve the economic burden on the low-income family. family changed for clarity and conciseness). As the low-income group rely mainly on the train or bus during these individuals primarily depend on trains and buses for their daily commute, the commutes, granting them free access can definely help would enable them to save a significant amount of expenses.Hence, they can spend the money on money. This additional income could then be allocated towards other essential expenses (daily necessaries.necessaries changed to essential expenses for better word choice), ultimately improving their overall quality of life.
8 Mind Map
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Public transportation
- Tax revenue support
- Environmental benefits
- Financial relief
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Environmental impact
- Reduced carbon emissions
- Decreased traffic congestion
- Improved air quality
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Financial benefits
- Savings for low-income families
- Increased disposable income
- Improved quality of life
9 Key Words
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | English Translation | Sample Sentence |
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| Alleviate | /əˈliːvi.eɪt/ | Verb | To make something less severe | Alleviate | Free public transportation can help alleviate the financial burden on low-income families. |
| Carbon dioxide | /ˌkɑr.bən daɪˈɑk.saɪd/ | Noun | A colorless, odorless gas produced by burning carbon and organic compounds and by respiration | Carbon dioxide | Private cars are responsible for the increasing levels of carbon dioxide emissions. |
| Congestion | /kənˈdʒes.tʃən/ | Noun | The state of being overcrowded, especially with traffic or people | Congestion | Offering free public transportation would reduce traffic congestion in cities. |
| Disposable income | /dɪˈspoʊ.zə.bəl ˈɪn.kʌm/ | Noun | Income remaining after deduction of taxes and other mandatory charges, available to be spent or saved as one wishes. | Disposable income | Free public transportation would increase disposable income for low-income families. |
| Emissions | /ɪˈmɪʃ.ən/ | Noun | The act of sending out gas, heat, light, etc. | Emissions | Carbon dioxide emissions can be reduced by encouraging the use of public transportation. |
| Financial burden | /faɪˈnæn.ʃəl ˈbɝː.dən/ | Noun | A heavy load of money that has to be paid | Financial burden | Free public transportation can alleviate the financial burden on low-income families. |
| Public transportation | /ˈpʌb.lɪk ˌtræns.pərˈteɪ.ʃən/ | Noun | A system of vehicles such as buses and trains which operate at regular times on fixed routes and are used by the public. | Public transportation | In my opinion, public transportation should be supported by tax revenue. |
| Quality of life | /ˈkwɑl.ə.ti əv laɪf/ | Noun | The level of satisfaction and comfort that a person or group enjoys | Quality of life | Offering free public transportation would improve the overall quality of life for low-income families. |
| Urban environment | /ˈɝː.bən ɪnˈvaɪ.rən.mənt/ | Noun | The surroundings or conditions in which people live or work, especially in a city | Urban environment | Free public transportation can contribute to improving both the natural and urban environment. |
6 Revised Essay
In my opinion, public transportation should be supported by tax revenue due to various factors.
Firstly, echoing Paul's perspective, free public transportation can contribute to improving both the natural and urban environment. By offering free access to trains and buses, people would be encouraged to utilize public transport instead of relying on private cars, which are responsible for the increasing levels of carbon dioxide emissions. Consequently, this would help alleviate air pollution and reduce traffic congestion in cities.
Secondly, free public transportation can alleviate the financial burden on low-income families. As these individuals primarily depend on trains and buses for their daily commutes, granting them free access would enable them to save a significant amount of money. This additional income could then be allocated towards other essential expenses, ultimately improving their overall quality of life.
2用户样本 #2
While Kelly's perspective is commendable, I still find Paul' arugment more persuasive.
Indeed, government charge lots of taxes from us, and public tr...
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用户样本 #2
While Kelly's perspective is commendable, I still find Paul' arugment more persuasive. Indeed, government charge lots of taxes from us, and public tr...
用户样本
While Kelly's perspective is commendable, I still find Paul' arugment more persuasive. Indeed, government charge lots of taxes from us, and public transportation can be cover by those revenue easily. However, government also attribute to some other investment such as developing the tecnology, military. Consequently, I too,as mentioned by Paul, concur that the commual transportation should charge some money. Firstly, have some income from passenger, so the transportation company can offer better service. For example, the stations will more neatly and clean, and more convenient funcations could be add in, such as bus wifi. And can significantly improve the travelling experience. Secondly, will the avaliable of easily access to public transportation, people can go to the office, go shopping without driving a car, which will efficiently mitigate the environmental problems. As a result, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective on this matter.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 3.5
2. 预估分数
25. 3 任务完成度
从任务完成度的角度来看,这篇文章基本上满足了题目要求,表达了对公共交通收费的观点,并给出了一些论据。但是,文章在语言表达和论据方面还有待提高。首先,文章中存在一些语法错误和不够准确的词汇使用,需要进行修改。其次,在阐述观点时可以更具体一些,给出更详细的例子或解释。
改进建议(英文示例):
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修改语法错误和词汇使用:例如,“government charge lots of taxes from us” 可以改为 "governments collect a significant amount of taxes from us"。
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阐述观点时给出更具体的例子:例如,在谈到公共交通收费可以提高服务质量时,可以举一个实际的城市或国家作为例子。
4. 文章结构与组织
从文章结构和组织的角度来看,这篇文章有明确的结构,包括引言、正文和结论。然而,在段落之间的过渡方面还有待加强。建议在不同观点之间使用恰当的过渡词或短语,使文章更加流畅。
改进建议(英文示例):
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在段落之间使用过渡词:例如,在第一个论点和第二个论点之间,可以加入 "Furthermore" 或 "In addition"。
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在正文段落中明确表达观点:例如,在谈到环境问题时,可以在段落开头明确提出这一观点,如 "Another benefit of charging for public transportation is its positive impact on the environment."
5. 语法批改
While Kelly's perspective is commendable, I still find Paul'(Unpaired braces, brackets, quotation marks and similar symbols) arugmentargument(misspelling) more persuasive.
Indeed, government charge lots of taxes from us, and public transportation can be cover by those revenuethis revenue('this' vs. 'these') easily. However, government also attributeattributes(The dog always bark(s) at me) to some other investment such as developing the tecnologytechnology(misspelling), military. Consequently, I too,as, as(Use of whitespace before comma and before/after parentheses) mentioned by Paul, concur that the commualcommunal(misspelling) transportation should charge some money.
Firstly, have some income from passenger, so the transportation company can offer better service. For example, the stations will more neatly and clean, and more convenient funcationsfunctions(misspelling) could be addbe added(could/should/must be does (done)) in, such as bus wifiWi-Fi(WiFi (Wi-Fi)). And can significantly improve the travelling experience.
Secondly, will the avaliableavailable(misspelling) of easily access to public transportation, people can go to the office, go shopping without driving a car, which will efficiently mitigate the environmental problems.
As a result, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective on this matter.
Title: 6 文章修订
While Kelly's perspective holds merit, I find Paul's argument to be more persuasive.
Indeed, the government collects substantial taxes from citizens, and public transportation could be covered by this revenue. However, the government also allocates funds to other investments such as technology development and military expenditures. Consequently, I agree with Paul that communal transportation should charge a nominal fee.
Firstly, generating income from passengers enables transportation companies to provide better services. For instance, stations could be maintained more efficiently and kept clean. Additionally, convenient features such as Wi-Fi on buses could be introduced, significantly improving the overall travel experience.
Secondly, with easy access to public transportation, people can commute to work or go shopping without relying on personal vehicles. This shift would effectively mitigate environmental issues caused by excessive car usage.
As a result, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective on this matter. (148 words)
While Kelly's perspective is commendable, holds merit (revised for clarity and natural tone), I still find Paul' arugment Paul's argument to be more persuasive.
Indeed, the government charge lots of collects substantial taxes from us, citizens (revised for clarity and natural tone), and public transportation can be cover could be covered by those revenue easily. this revenue. However, the government also attribute to some allocates funds to other investment investments such as developing the tecnology, military. technology development and military expenditures (revised for clarity and proper word usage). Consequently, I too,as mentioned by Paul, concur agree with Paul that the commual communal transportation should charge some money. a nominal fee (revised for clarity and natural tone).
Firstly, have some generating income from passenger, so the passengers enables transportation company can offer companies to provide better service. services (revised for clarity and natural tone). For example, the instance, stations will could be maintained more neatly and clean, and more efficiently and kept clean (revised for clarity). Additionally, convenient funcations could be add in, features such as bus wifi. And can Wi-Fi on buses could be introduced, significantly improve improving the travelling experience. overall travel experience (revised for clarity and natural tone).
Secondly, will the avaliable of easily with easy access to public transportation, people can go to the office, commute to work or go shopping without driving a car, which will efficiently relying on personal vehicles (revised for clarity). This shift would effectively mitigate the environmental problems. issues caused by excessive car usage (revised for clarity).
As a result, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective on this matter.
Title: 8 思维导图
1. Introduction
- Kelly's perspective
- Paul's argument (more persuasive)
2. Government revenue and allocation
- Taxes collected from citizens
- Other investments (technology, military)
- Agree with Paul on nominal fee for public transportation
3. Benefits of charging a fee
a. Improved services
- Efficient station maintenance and cleanliness
- Convenient features (Wi-Fi on buses)
b. Encouraging public transportation usage
- Commuting to work or shopping without personal vehicles
- Mitigating environmental issues from car usage
4. Conclusion
- Aligned with Paul's perspective
Title: 9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| perspective | /pərˈspɛktɪv/ | noun | A particular attitude or view | 观点 | While Kelly's perspective holds merit, I find Paul's argument to be more persuasive. |
| revenue | /ˈrɛvənju/ | noun | Income generated by a business | 收入 | The government collects substantial taxes from citizens, and public transportation could be covered by this revenue. |
| allocate | /ˈæləkeɪt/ | verb | To distribute resources or duties | 分配 | However, the government also allocates funds to other investments such as technology development and military expenditures. | ||
| nominal | /ˈnɒmɪnəl/ | adjective | Very small; far below the real value| 名义上的 | Consequently, I agree with Paul that communal transportation should charge a nominal fee. | ||||
| mitigate | /ˈmɪtɪgeɪt/ | verb | To make less severe or harmful | 减轻 | This shift would effectively mitigate environmental issues caused by excessive car usage. |
| commute | /kəˈmjuːt/ | verb | To travel regularly between two places| 通勤 | With easy access to public transportation, people can commute to work or go shopping without relying on personal vehicles. | ||
| maintenance | /ˈmeɪntənəns/ | noun | The process of preserving something in proper condition| 维护 | For instance, stations could be maintained more efficiently and kept clean. | ||
| expenditure | /ɪkˈspɛndɪtʃər/ | noun | The act of spending funds | 开支 | The government also allocates funds to other investments such as technology development and military expenditures. |
| aligned | /əˈlaɪnd/ | adjective | In agreement or cooperation | 一致的 | As a result, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective on this matter. | |
| environmental | /ɪnvaɪrənˈmɛntl/ | adjective | Relating to the natural world and its preservation| 环境的 | This shift would effectively mitigate environmental issues caused by excessive car usage. |
3用户样本 #3
As far as I'm concerned, I believe that Paul's belief is understandable that public transportation should be free. I'd like to stem from two primate r...
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用户样本 #3
As far as I'm concerned, I believe that Paul's belief is understandable that public transportation should be free. I'd like to stem from two primate r...
用户样本
As far as I'm concerned, I believe that Paul's belief is understandable that public transportation should be free. I'd like to stem from two primate reasons. Firstly, free transportation will undoubtedly decrease the payment, so that people no matter live in poverty places or remote areas will have chance to go anywhere they want more conveniently. Secondly, if the public transportation does not get money from people. Then, more and more people would choose to go out through public transportation like underground and buses. As a result, the primate cars would be less and the road would be not as croweded as it used to be, and it could save people's time to go to work. Personally, fewer cars on the road also means that the noise will not be louder than before, so I will no longer be waken up by the noise made by cars in the morning anymore.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 3.5
2. 预估分数
24. 3 任务完成度
从任务完成度的角度来看,这篇文章基本上满足了题目要求,表达了作者对于免费公共交通的观点,并给出了两个原因。但是,文章在论述过程中有些地方可以进一步改进。例如,在支持观点时可以给出更具体的例子和数据,以增强说服力。此外,语言表达方面也有待提高,存在一些语法错误和用词不当的情况。
改进建议(英文):
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Provide specific examples or data to support your viewpoint, such as the percentage of people who could benefit from free public transportation or the potential reduction in traffic congestion.
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Revise grammar errors and word choices to make your essay more accurate and clear.
4. 文章结构与组织
从文章结构与组织的角度来看,这篇文章具有清晰的结构,包括引言、正文和结尾。然而,在段落划分和过渡方面还有待改进。例如,在提到两个主要原因时可以分成两个段落,并使用恰当的过渡词汇来连接各个段落。
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Divide the main reasons into separate paragraphs and use appropriate transition words to connect them, such as "Firstly" and "Secondly."
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Improve the conclusion by summarizing your main points and restating your opinion in a more concise manner.
5. 语法批改
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Section Title: 6 Article Revision
In my opinion, Paul's perspective on providing free public transportation is quite valid. My stance is based on two primary reasons. First, offering free transportation would undoubtedly increase accessibility for individuals residing in impoverished or remote areas, allowing them to travel more conveniently. Second, if public transportation were to be offered without charge, it would encourage a greater number of people to utilize services such as subways and buses. Consequently, there would be fewer private vehicles on the road, leading to reduced traffic congestion and shorter commute times. Additionally, the decrease in vehicular traffic would also contribute to a quieter environment, alleviating noise pollution in urban areas. (112 words)
As far as I'm concerned, I believe that In my opinion, Paul's belief is understandable that perspective on providing free public transportation should be free. I'd like is quite valid (revised for clarity and natural tone). My stance is based on two primary reasons (changed "primate" to stem from two primate reasons. Firstly, "primary" as it was a typo). First, offering free transportation will would undoubtedly decrease the payment, so that people no matter live increase accessibility for individuals residing in poverty places impoverished or remote areas will have chance (rephrased for clarity and natural tone), allowing them to go anywhere they want travel more conveniently. Secondly, Second, if the public transportation does not get money from people. Then, more and more were to be offered without charge (rephrased for clarity), it would encourage a greater number of people would choose to go out through public transportation like underground utilize services such as subways and buses. As a result, the primate cars Consequently, there would be less and the road would be not as croweded as it used to be, and it could save people's time to go to work. Personally, fewer cars private vehicles on the road (rephrased for clarity), leading to reduced traffic congestion and shorter commute times. Additionally, the decrease in vehicular traffic would also means that the contribute to a quieter environment (rephrased for clarity), alleviating noise will not be louder than before, so I will no longer be waken up by the noise made by cars pollution in the morning anymore.urban areas.
8 思维导图
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引言
- Paul的观点
- 免费公共交通的支持
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增加可达性
- 贫困或偏远地区的居民
- 方便出行
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鼓励使用公共交通
- 地铁和公交车
- 更多人选择公共交通
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减少私家车
- 缓解交通拥堵
- 缩短通勤时间
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环境效益
- 减少噪音污染
- 城市环境改善
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结论
- 免费公共交通的优势
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
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| perspective | /pərˈspektɪv/ | noun | a particular attitude or way of considering a matter | 观点 | Paul's perspective on free public transportation is valid. |
| accessibility | /əkˌsesəˈbɪlɪti/ | noun | the quality of being easy to obtain or use | 可达性 | Free transportation would increase accessibility for individuals. |
| impoverished | /ɪmˈpɒvərɪʃt/ | adjective | poor; without money | 贫困的 | Individuals residing in impoverished areas would benefit. |
| remote | /rɪˈməʊt/ | adjective | far away in distance or time | 偏远的 | Remote areas would have better access to transportation. |
| congestion | /kənˈdʒestʃən/ | noun | the state of being overcrowded, especially with traffic | 交通拥堵 | Reduced traffic congestion would result from free transportation. |
| commute | /kəˈmjuːt/ | verb | to travel some distance regularly between one's home and work | 通勤 | Shorter commute times would be a benefit of free transportation. |
| vehicular | /vɪˈhɪkjʊlər/ | adjective | involving or relating to vehicles | 车辆的 | The decrease in vehicular traffic would alleviate noise pollution. |
| noise pollution | /nɔɪz pəˈluːʃən/ | noun | harmful or annoying levels of noise | 噪音污染 | A quieter environment would result from reduced noise pollution. |
| urban | /ˈɜrbən/ | -- | -- | -- | -- |
4用户样本 #4
While Claire puts forward a compelling argument that people should not pay extra tax to build public transportation. It is undoubtedly it will increas...
分数25
用户样本 #4
While Claire puts forward a compelling argument that people should not pay extra tax to build public transportation. It is undoubtedly it will increas...
用户样本
While Claire puts forward a compelling argument that people should not pay extra tax to build public transportation. It is undoubtedly it will increase the finance burden on every citizens and have no benefit for those who do not take public transportation. However, from my perspective, this will indeed have some positive effects. People will definitely willing to take public transportation instead of private car if they pay the tax revenue, which will significantly enhance the environment and reduce air pollution. Since no one want their money to be wasted, unlike the condition that no one pay the tax for transportation, this method force people to choose more green way to commute. From my perspective, a good environment weighs out anything else.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
25. 3 任务完成度
总体来说,你的文章完成了任务要求,表达了对于是否应该为公共交通支付额外税收的观点,并给出了一定的论据。但是,你可以在以下方面进行改进:
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在论述中加入更多具体的例子和细节,以增强说服力。
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对于反对意见进行一定程度的讨论和反驳,使观点更加全面。
示例1(增加细节):从环保角度来看,公共交通能够减少私家车上路的数量,从而降低空气污染和温室气体排放。例如,在某些城市实施公共交通税收后,私家车使用率下降了20%,同时空气质量得到显著改善。
示例2(讨论反驳):虽然有人认为额外的税收会给不使用公共交通的人带来负担,但我们可以从长远利益出发。通过提高公共交通质量和便利性,更多人会选择放弃私家车转而使用公共交通。这样一来,整个社会的生活质量都将得到提高。
4. 文章结构与组织
你的文章结构基本清晰,包括了引言、正文和结论。然而,在组织方面还有一些可以改进的地方:
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在引言部分简要介绍讨论的背景和主题,使读者更容易理解文章内容。
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在段落之间加入过渡句,使文章更连贯。
示例1(引言):在当前社会中,交通问题日益严重,因此如何有效地解决交通问题成为了一个热门话题。关于是否应该为公共交通支付额外税收以改善交通状况的问题,人们意见不一。
示例2(过渡句):尽管有人认为额外税收会给不使用公共交通的人带来负担,但从环保角度来看,这种做法实际上是有利的。
5. 语法批改
WhileWhile,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) Claire puts forward a compelling argument that people should not pay extra tax to build public transportation. It is undoubtedlyundoubtedly,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) it will increase the finance burden on every citizenscitizen('every/each' + SINGULAR) and have no benefit for those who do not take public transportation. However, from my perspective, this will indeed have
some positive effects. People will definitely willing to take public transportation instead of private car if they pay the tax revenue, which will significantly enhance the environment and reduce air pollution. Since no one want their money to be wasted, unlike the condition that no one pay the tax for transportation, this method force people to choose more green way to commute. From my perspective, a good environment weighs out anything else.
Section Title: 6 文章修订
Revised Essay:
While Claire presents a persuasive argument against imposing additional taxes for public transportation development, claiming it would increase the financial burden on citizens and offer no benefits to those who do not use these services, I believe there are several positive outcomes to consider. Firstly, if individuals contribute to funding public transportation through taxes, they may be more inclined to utilize these services instead of relying on private vehicles. This shift in behavior could lead to significant environmental improvements and reduced air pollution.
In my opinion, the value of a cleaner environment surpasses any potential drawbacks associated with increased taxation. Encouraging people to choose eco-friendly commuting options by having them contribute financially can foster a sense of responsibility and motivate them to make greener choices. Ultimately, this collective effort can have far-reaching benefits for society as a whole. (144 words)
While Claire puts presents a persuasive argument (changed "puts forward a compelling argument that people should not pay extra tax to build argument" to "presents a persuasive argument" for better flow and clarity) against imposing additional taxes for public transportation. It is undoubtedly transportation development (added "development" to specify the purpose of the tax), claiming it will would increase the finance financial burden (changed "finance burden" to "financial burden" for proper phrasing) on every citizens and have offer no benefit for benefits to those who do not take public transportation. However, from my perspective, this will indeed have ¶ some use these services, I believe there are several positive effects. People will definitely willing to take outcomes to consider. Firstly, if individuals contribute to funding public transportation through taxes, they may be more inclined (changed "definitely willing" to "more inclined" for a more accurate expression of likelihood) to utilize these services instead of relying on private car if they pay the tax revenue, which will significantly enhance the environment and reduce vehicles. This shift in behavior could lead to significant environmental improvements and reduced air pollution. Since no one want their money to be wasted, unlike the condition that no one pay the tax for transportation,
In my opinion, the value of a cleaner environment surpasses (changed "weighs out" to "surpasses" for better word choice) any potential drawbacks associated with increased taxation. Encouraging people to choose eco-friendly commuting options by having them contribute financially can foster a sense of responsibility and motivate them to make greener choices. Ultimately, this method force people to choose more green way to commute. From my perspective, a good environment weighs out anything else.collective effort can have far-reaching benefits for society as a whole.
Display title: 8 思维导图
Mindmap:
1. Introduction
- Claire's argument
- Counterargument
2. Public transportation usage
- Tax contribution
- Shift in behavior
3. Environmental benefits
- Reduced air pollution
- Cleaner environment
4. Encouraging eco-friendly choices
- Financial contribution
- Sense of responsibility
5. Societal benefits
- Collective effort
6. Conclusion
Display title: 9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentences |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| persuasive | /pərˈsweɪsɪv/ | adjective | able to convince someone to believe or do something | 有说服力的 | Claire presents a persuasive argument against imposing additional taxes. |
| financial burden | /faɪˈnænʃəl ˈbɜrdn/ | noun | the weight of monetary responsibilities and obligations | 财务负担 | Imposing additional taxes would increase the financial burden on citizens. |
| inclined | /ɪnˈklaɪnd/ | adjective | having a tendency or preference | 倾向于 | They may be more inclined to utilize public transportation services. |
| environmental | /ɪnˌvaɪrənˈmɛntl/ | adjective | _relating to the natural world and its preservation | _环境的 | _This shift in behavior could lead to significant environmental improvements. |
| drawbacks | /ˈdrɔbæk/ | noun | _disadvantages or negative aspects | _弊端 | _The value of a cleaner environment surpasses any potential drawbacks. |
| eco-friendly | /ˌikoʊˈfrɛndli/ | adjective | _not harmful to the environment | _环保的 | _Encouraging people to choose eco-friendly commuting options. |
| responsibility | /rɪˌspɒnsəˈbɪlɪti/ | noun | _the state of being accountable for something | _责任 | _Financial contribution can foster a sense of responsibility. |
| motivate | /ˈmoʊtəveɪt/ | verb | _to provide a reason or incentive for someone to act | _激励 | _Motivate them to make greener choices. |
| collective effort | /kəˈlɛktɪv ˈɛfərt/ | noun | joint action or work by a group of people | 集体努力 | This collective effort can have far-reaching benefits for society as a whole. |
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From my perspective, I think public transportation should charge people. While I appreciate Paul's recognition of the environmental benefits that free...
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From my perspective, I think public transportation should charge people. While I appreciate Paul's recognition of the environmental benefits that free...
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From my perspective, I think public transportation should charge people. While I appreciate Paul's recognition of the environmental benefits that free public transportation would result in, I find Kelly's view on the distribution of taxes paid by citizens more compelling. Additionally, two significant reasons support my stance. Firstly, public transportation usually does not cost people too much. For example, taking a subway in my country only costs people 2 yuan. As a result, compared to other transportation like taking a taxi, public transportation is already the most cost-effective way. Secondly, for people living in less-developed area that do not have access to public transportation, it is unfair for them to pay additional taxes to construct public transportation in developed areas. For instance, in rural areas, it seems impossible for those people to save money for their daily compulsory needs while paying taxes to build subways in cities. In conclusion, the above two reasons explain why I contend that public transportation should not be free.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
26. 3 任务完成度
你的文章在任务完成度方面表现良好,基本上满足了题目要求。但是,为了更好地支持你的观点,可以考虑提供更多具体的例子和细节。此外,在引用其他同学观点时,可以更加深入地讨论他们的意见以及与你自己观点的关系。
改进示例1(英文): For instance, in cities with free public transportation, such as Tallinn, Estonia, the increased ridership has led to reduced traffic congestion and improved air quality.
改进示例2(英文): Moreover, a tiered pricing system could be implemented to ensure that low-income individuals still have access to affordable public transportation while not burdening taxpayers who do not use the service.
4. 文章结构与组织
文章结构和组织方面表现不错,有明确的引言、主体和结论。然而,在段落之间加入过渡句子可以使文章更连贯。此外,可以考虑将主要论点放在一个单独的段落中进行阐述。
改进建议1(简体中文): 在段落之间添加过渡句子,使文章更连贯。
改进建议2(简体中文): 将主要论点放在一个单独的段落中进行阐述。
改进示例1(英文): To begin with, it is important to consider the affordability of public transportation for the majority of people.
改进示例2(英文): In addition to the financial aspect, it is also crucial to address the potential environmental benefits of free public transportation.
5. 语法批改
From my perspective, I think public transportation should charge people. While I appreciate Paul's recognition of the environmental benefits that free public transportation would result in, I find Kelly's view on the distribution of taxes paid by citizens more compelling. Additionally, two significant reasons support my stance. Firstly, public transportation usually does not cost people too much. For example, taking a subway in my country only costs people 2 yuan. As a result, compared to other transportationforms of transportation, like taking a taxi, public transportation is already the most cost-effective way. Secondly, for people living in less-developed area thatareas who do not have access to public transportation, it is unfair for them to pay additional taxes to construct public transportation in developed areas. For instance, in rural areas, it seems impossible for those people to save money for their daily compulsory needs while paying taxes to build subways in cities. In conclusion, the above two reasons explain why I contend that public transportation should not be free.
Section Title: 6 文章修订
In my opinion, public transportation should not be free, despite the potential environmental benefits highlighted by Paul. I find Kelly's argument regarding the allocation of tax revenue more persuasive. Two primary reasons support my stance. First, public transportation is generally affordable and already a cost-effective option compared to alternatives like taxis. For instance, in my country, a subway ride costs a mere 2 yuan. Second, it would be unjust for residents in less-developed areas without access to public transportation to bear additional tax burdens for the development of such infrastructure in more developed regions. People living in rural areas may struggle to meet their daily necessities while also contributing taxes for urban subway construction. These two factors substantiate my position that public transportation should not be provided free of charge. (134 words)
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8 思维导图
1. Introduction
- Public transportation debate
- Paul's environmental benefits
- Kelly's tax revenue argument
2. Affordability of public transportation
- Cost-effective option
- Example: 2 yuan subway ride
3. Unjust tax burden on less-developed areas
- No access to public transportation
- Struggle to meet daily necessities and contribute taxes
4. Conclusion
- Public transportation should not be free
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
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| public | /ˈpʌblɪk/ | adjective | Relating to or involving people in general | 公共的 | Public transportation is an essential service for many people. |
| transportation | /ˌtrænspərˈteɪʃən/ | noun | The action of transporting someone or something | 交通 | Efficient public transportation can reduce traffic congestion. |
| affordable | /əˈfɔrdəbəl/ | adjective | Inexpensive; reasonably priced | 负担得起的 | Public transportation is generally affordable for most people. |
| cost-effective | /kɒst ɪˈfektɪv/ | adjective | Providing good value for the amount paid | 划算的 | Using public transportation is a cost-effective way to travel in the city. |
| unjust | /ʌnˈdʒʌst/ | adjective | Not based on or behaving according to what is right | 不公正的 | It would be unjust to impose additional taxes on people who do not benefit from public transportation. |
| tax burden | /tæks ˈbɜrdən/ | noun | The amount of tax that a person or company must pay | 税收负担 | The tax burden on less-developed areas should not be increased for public transportation in developed regions. |
| infrastructure | /ˈɪnfrəstrʌktʃər/ | noun | The basic physical and organizational structures needed | 基础设施 | Investing in infrastructure can improve the quality of life for residents. |
| allocation | /ˌæləˈkeɪʃən/ | noun | The process of distributing something | 分配 | Proper allocation of resources is crucial for a successful project. |
| environmental | /ɪnˌvaɪrənˈmentl/ | adjective | Relating to the natural world and the impact of human activity on its condition | 环境的 | Environmental benefits are an important consideration when discussing public transportation policies. |
| persuasive | /pərˈsweɪsɪv/ | adjective | Good at persuading someone to do or believe something through reasoning or the use of temptation | 有说服力的_ | Kelly's argument regarding the allocation of tax revenue was more persuasive than Paul's environmental benefits. |
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I personally believe public transportation should be free to all.
As Paul said, it would encourage the public to take public transportation, which red...
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I personally believe public transportation should be free to all. As Paul said, it would encourage the public to take public transportation, which red...
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I personally believe public transportation should be free to all. As Paul said, it would encourage the public to take public transportation, which reduces the use of private car and benefits the environment. Furthermore, in the long term people will cultivate a low-carbon habits, which develop the sustainability and build a better environment for the city. Still, someone might argue that people are not willing to pay the additional taxes. However, free public transportation could offer appreciable convenience to public. Everytime people take a bus for free, they could feel satisfaciton and pleasure towards the government, and the emotion would accumulate day by day. Therefore, it is also a good solution to develop the reputation of the government.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
- 27
3. 任务完成度
这篇文章在任务完成度方面表现良好,但仍有一些改进空间。首先,尽管你提到了Paul的观点,但你可以更深入地讨论Kelly的观点以及为什么你不同意她的看法。此外,尝试提供更多具体的例子来支持你的观点。
示例1:
- "Although Kelly raises concerns about the additional tax burden, the long-term benefits of free public transportation, such as reduced traffic congestion and improved air quality, could outweigh the costs."
示例2:
- "In addition to Paul's point about cleaner air, free public transportation could also promote social equity by providing equal access to job opportunities and essential services for people from all income levels."
4. 文章结构与组织
文章结构和组织方面整体不错,但可以进行一些调整以使其更清晰。首先,在引言部分明确表达你的观点,并简要概述你将在正文中讨论的主要论据。其次,在正文段落中,使用清晰的过渡词和短语来连接不同的想法。最后,在结论部分总结你的观点并重申主要论据。
示例1:
- 引言部分: "In my opinion, public transportation should be free to all, as it would not only benefit the environment but also promote social equity and improve the government's reputation."
示例2:
- 过渡词和短语: "Moreover, providing free public transportation could help bridge the gap between different income groups by ensuring equal access to essential services and job opportunities."
5. 语法批改
I personally believe public transportation should be free to all.
As Paul said, it would encourage the public to take public transportation, which reduces the use of private car and benefits the environment. Furthermore, in the long term people will cultivate a low-carbon habits, which develop the sustainability and build a better environment for the city.
Still, someone might argue that people are not willing to pay the additional taxes. However, free public transportation could offer appreciable convenience to publicthe public(This rule identifies whether the article 'the' is missing in a sentence.). EverytimeEvery time(misspelling) people take a bus for free, they could feel satisfacitonsatisfaction(misspelling) and pleasure towards the government, and the emotion would accumulate day by day. Therefore, it is also a good solution to develop the reputation of the government.
Title: 6 文章修订
I firmly believe that public transportation should be made available to everyone at no cost. As Paul mentioned, offering free public transportation would encourage more people to utilize these services, subsequently reducing the reliance on private vehicles and promoting environmental sustainability. Over time, this would foster a low-carbon lifestyle among citizens, contributing to the overall well-being of the city.
Admittedly, some may argue against additional taxes to fund free public transportation. However, it is essential to consider the long-term benefits and convenience it provides to the general public. Each time individuals utilize free public transportation services, they are likely to experience satisfaction and gratitude towards the government. This positive sentiment would accumulate over time, ultimately enhancing the government's reputation.
Moreover, providing free public transportation can help bridge social and economic gaps by granting equal access to essential services for all citizens. This accessibility can lead to increased opportunities for education and employment while fostering a sense of community among diverse populations. In essence, investing in free public transportation is an investment in social equity and long-term urban development. (181 words)
I personally firmly believe that public transportation should be free to all. ¶ made available to everyone at no cost (revised for emphasis). As Paul said, it mentioned, offering free public transportation would encourage the public to take public transportation, which reduces the use more people to utilize these services (clarified the subject), subsequently reducing the reliance on private vehicles and promoting environmental sustainability (improved sentence flow). Over time, this would foster a low-carbon lifestyle among citizens, contributing to the overall well-being of private car and the city (maintained original meaning).
Admittedly, some may argue against additional taxes to fund free public transportation (addressed potential counterargument). However, it is essential to consider the long-term benefits the environment. Furthermore, in the long term people will cultivate a low-carbon habits, which develop the sustainability and build a better environment for the city. ¶ Still, someone might argue that people and convenience it provides to the general public (added context). Each time individuals utilize free public transportation services, they are not willing to pay the additional taxes. However, free public transportation could offer appreciable convenience to public. Everytime people take a bus for free, they could feel satisfaciton and pleasure likely to experience satisfaction and gratitude towards the government, and the emotion government (clarified emotions). This positive sentiment would accumulate day over time, ultimately enhancing the government's reputation (maintained original meaning).
Moreover, providing free public transportation can help bridge social and economic gaps by day. Therefore, it granting equal access to essential services for all citizens (introduced a new supporting point). This accessibility can lead to increased opportunities for education and employment while fostering a sense of community among diverse populations (expanded on benefits). In essence, investing in free public transportation is also a good solution to develop the reputation of the government.an investment in social equity and long-term urban development (concluded with a strong statement).
Title: 8 思维导图
I. Introduction
A. Public transportation
B. Free access
II. Environmental Sustainability
A. Reduced reliance on private vehicles
B. Low-carbon lifestyle
III. Government Reputation
A. Satisfaction and gratitude
B. Enhanced reputation
IV. Social and Economic Gaps
A. Equal access to essential services
B. Increased opportunities for education and employment
V. Conclusion
A. Investment in social equity
B. Long-term urban development
Title: 9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
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| public transportation | ˈpʌblɪk ˌtrænspərˈteɪʃən | noun | Transport services provided for the general public | 公共交通 | Offering free public transportation would encourage more people to utilize these services. |
| environmental sustainability | ɪnˌvaɪrənˈmɛntl səsteɪnəˈbɪlɪti | noun | The ability to maintain natural resources and ecosystems over time | 环境可持续性 | Promoting environmental sustainability is essential for the well-being of the city. |
| low-carbon lifestyle | /loʊ ˈkɑrbən/ /ˈlaɪfstaɪl/ | noun | A way of living that produces fewer greenhouse gas emissions | /低碳生活方式/ | /Over time, this would foster a low-carbon lifestyle among citizens./ |
| sentiment | ˈsɛntɪmənt | noun | A feeling or opinion about something | 情感 | This positive sentiment would accumulate over time, ultimately enhancing the government's reputation. |
| social equity | /ˈsoʊʃəl/ /ˈɛkwɪti/ | noun | Fairness and justice in social policies and practices | /社会公平/ | /Investing in free public transportation is an investment in social equity./ |
| urban development | /ˈɜrbən/ /dɪˈvɛləpmənt/ | noun | The growth and improvement of cities | /城市发展/ | /Free public transportation contributes to long-term urban development./ |
| accessibility | /ækˌsɛsəˈbɪlɪti/ | noun | The quality of being easy to approach or use | /可达性/ | /Accessibility can lead to increased opportunities for education and employment./ |
| convenience | /kənˈvinjəns/ | noun | The state of being able to proceed with something with little effort or difficulty | /便利性/ | /It is essential to consider the long-term benefits and convenience it provides to the general public./ |
| diverse populations | /daɪˈvɜrs//papjʊˈleʃ(ə)nz/ | noun | Different groups of people within a community | /多样化人口群体/ | /Fostering a sense of community among diverse populations is important./ |
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Regarding the contentious topic by the professor, I endorse the standpoint of Kelly.
Just as Kelly elaborated, it is indisputable to say that the publ...
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用户样本 #7
Regarding the contentious topic by the professor, I endorse the standpoint of Kelly. Just as Kelly elaborated, it is indisputable to say that the publ...
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Regarding the contentious topic by the professor, I endorse the standpoint of Kelly. Just as Kelly elaborated, it is indisputable to say that the public the public already bears a significant tax burden for essential services such as education, infrastructure, and law enforcement and should not be required to afford the additional taxes. Furthermore, I think imposing additional taxes to subsidize free public transportation overlooks the consistency of individuals' specific needs with the utilization of public transportation, as not all individuals utilize this service. For instance, some residents could have their own vehicles that offer greater convenience and comfort than public transportation. In addition, they have to pay substantial expenses for fuel and maintenance of their vehicles. Consequently, funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone. On the other hand, when considering Paul's argument, one limitation could be immediately found that free public transportation could not guarantee a significant shift to public modes of transport, which means individuals would not abandon their private transportations, as private transportation could make it easier to meet individuals' personality demands due to their flexibility and personal satisfaction they provide compared to crowded public transportation.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 4.0
2. 预估分数
- 27
3. 任务完成度
这篇文章在任务完成方面做得相当不错,对教授的问题给出了明确的回答,并表达了自己的观点。然而,为了更好地支持观点,可以考虑添加更多具体的例子和详细信息。此外,在讨论公共交通对环境和健康的影响时,可以提供一些数据或研究结果来增强说服力。
改进示例1(英文): Instead of just mentioning that funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone, you could provide a specific example, such as "For instance, a family living in a rural area with limited access to public transportation would still have to pay the additional taxes despite not benefiting from the service."
改进示例2(英文): When discussing the potential benefits of free public transportation on health and pollution, you could include some statistics or research findings, such as "According to a study conducted by XYZ University, cities with free public transportation saw a 10% decrease in air pollution levels and a corresponding improvement in respiratory health among residents."
4. 文章结构与组织
文章整体结构清晰,包括引言、正文和结论。每段都集中讨论一个特定观点,并提供支持细节。然而,可以在段落之间添加更明确的过渡词或短语,以帮助读者更好地理解文章的逻辑顺序。
改进示例1(英文): To improve the transition between the discussion of Kelly's viewpoint and Paul's viewpoint, you could add a sentence like "While Kelly raises valid concerns about the financial burden on taxpayers, Paul offers a different perspective on the potential benefits of free public transportation."
改进示例2(英文): To create a smoother transition between discussing the limitations of Paul's argument and concluding your essay, you could use a phrase like "In conclusion, although free public transportation may have some environmental and health benefits, it is important to consider the financial implications for taxpayers and whether it would truly lead to a significant shift in transportation habits."
5. 语法批改
Regarding the contentious topic by the professor, I endorse the standpoint of Kelly.
Just as Kelly elaborated, it is indisputable to say that the public the publicthe public(Repetition of two words ('at the at the')) already bears a significant tax burden for essential services such as education, infrastructure, and law enforcement and should not be required to afford the additional taxes. Furthermore, I think imposing additional taxes to subsidize free public transportation overlooks the consistency of individuals' specific needs with the utilization of public transportation, as not all individuals utilize this service. For instance, some residents could have their own vehicles that offer greater convenience and comfort than public transportation. In addition, they have to pay substantial expenses for (Two consecutive spaces)fuel and maintenance of their vehicles. Consequently, funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone.
On the other hand, when considering Paul's argument, one limitation could be immediately found that (Two consecutive spaces)free public transportation could not guarantee a significant shift to public modes of transport, which means individuals would not abandon their private transportations, as private transportation could make it easier to meet individuals' personality demands due to their flexibility and personal satisfaction they provide compared to crowded public transportation.
Section Title: The Debate on Free Public Transportation
In response to the professor's question, I concur with Kelly's perspective on the issue. As Kelly rightly pointed out, the public already shoulders a considerable tax burden for essential services such as education, infrastructure, and law enforcement. Imposing additional taxes to subsidize free public transportation overlooks the varying needs and preferences of individuals in relation to their use of public transportation. For example, some residents may prefer using their own vehicles due to the greater convenience and comfort they provide compared to public transit. These individuals also incur significant expenses for fuel and maintenance of their vehicles. Consequently, funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone.
On the other hand, Paul's argument has its merits but also contains a notable limitation. While free public transportation could potentially lead to fewer cars on the roads and cleaner air in cities, it does not guarantee a significant shift towards public modes of transport. Individuals may still opt for private transportation due to its flexibility and personal satisfaction compared to crowded public transit options.
In light of these arguments, it is crucial to consider alternative solutions that strike a balance between providing affordable access to public transportation while ensuring equitable distribution of costs among taxpayers. One possible approach could involve implementing targeted subsidies or discounts for specific groups such as low-income individuals or those with disabilities who rely heavily on public transit services. This would help alleviate financial burdens without imposing additional taxes on those who do not utilize these services regularly. (261 words)
Regarding the contentious topic by the professor, Section Title: The Debate on Free Public Transportation
In response to the professor's question, I endorse the standpoint of Kelly. ¶ Just as concur with Kelly's perspective on the issue (this revision clarifies that you are agreeing with Kelly elaborated, and connects it is indisputable to say that the public to the professor's question). As Kelly rightly pointed out (this phrase emphasizes that Kelly made a valid point), the public already bears a significant shoulders a considerable tax burden for essential services such as education, infrastructure, and law enforcement and should not be required to afford the additional taxes. Furthermore, I think imposing enforcement. Imposing additional taxes to subsidize free public transportation overlooks the consistency of individuals' specific varying needs with the utilization of public transportation, as and preferences of individuals in relation to their use of public transportation (this revision clarifies that not all individuals utilize this service. everyone has the same needs when it comes to using public transit). For instance, example, some residents could have may prefer using their own vehicles that offer due to the greater convenience and comfort than public transportation. In addition, they have to pay substantial provide compared to public transit. These individuals also incur significant expenses for for fuel and maintenance of their vehicles. Consequently, funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone. everyone (this sentence emphasizes that using tax revenue for this purpose might not be fair).
On the other hand, when considering Paul's argument, one argument has its merits but also contains a notable limitation (this phrase acknowledges that Paul's argument has some validity but also has a significant flaw). While free public transportation could be immediately found that free public transportation could potentially lead to fewer cars on the roads and cleaner air in cities, it does not guarantee a significant shift to towards public modes of transport, which means individuals would not abandon their transport (this sentence highlights the main limitation of Paul's argument). Individuals may still opt for private transportations, as private transportation could make it easier to meet individuals' personality demands transportation due to their its flexibility and personal satisfaction they provide compared to crowded public transportation.transit options (this sentence provides reasons why people might still choose private transportation).
In light of these arguments, it is crucial to consider alternative solutions that strike a balance between providing affordable access to public transportation while ensuring equitable distribution of costs among taxpayers (this sentence introduces potential solutions that address both sides' concerns). One possible approach could involve implementing targeted subsidies or discounts for specific groups such as low-income individuals or those with disabilities who rely heavily on public transit services (this sentence suggests a more targeted solution). This would help alleviate financial burdens without imposing additional taxes on those who do not utilize these services regularly (this sentence explains the benefits of the proposed solution).
8 思维导图
- 标题: 免费公共交通的辩论
- 凯利的观点
- 税收负担
- 个人需求和偏好
- 不公平的分配
- 保罗的观点
- 环境效益
- 私人交通的吸引力
- 替代方案
- 针对特定群体的补贴或折扣
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| concur | /kənˈkɜr/ | verb | to agree | 同意 | I concur with Kelly's perspective on the issue. |
| subsidize | /ˈsʌbsɪdaɪz/ | verb | to support financially | 补贴 | Imposing additional taxes to subsidize free public transportation overlooks the varying needs. |
| equitable | /ˈɛkwɪtəbəl/ | adjective | fair and impartial | 公平 | Funding public transportation through tax revenue may not be equitable for everyone. |
| merits | /ˈmɛrɪts/ | noun | the advantages or good qualities of something | 优点 | Paul's argument has its merits but also contains a notable limitation. |
| flexibility | /ˌflɛksəˈbɪlɪti/ | noun | the ability to change or adapt easily | 灵活性 | Individuals may still opt for private transportation due to its flexibility. |
| subsidies | /ˈsʌbsɪdiz/ | noun | financial assistance given by a government or organization | 补贴 | One possible approach could involve implementing targeted subsidies for specific groups. |
| low-income | /loʊ ˈɪnkəm/ | adjective | earning less money than average | 低收入的 | This would help alleviate financial burdens for low-income individuals. |
| disabilities | /dɪsəˈbɪlɪtiz/ | noun | conditions that limit a person's physical or mental abilities | 残疾 | Targeted subsidies could benefit those with disabilities who rely heavily on public transit services. |
| equitable distribution | /ˈɛkwɪtəbəl dɪstrɪˈbjuʃən/ | noun | fair allocation of resources | 公平分配 | It is crucial to ensure equitable distribution of costs among taxpayers. |
8用户样本 #8
I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on the reduction of traffic jam. to be more specific,...
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用户样本 #8
I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on the reduction of traffic jam. to be more specific,...
用户样本
I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on the reduction of traffic jam. to be more specific, through having free access to the public transportation, people are tended to commute by public transportation like buses, inevitably leading to the low frequency of personal cars. After that, there are less and less private cars getting jammed in the street roads. One supporting example is my personal commuting experience. I am accustomed to going to my law offices by my car, and there always exists lots of cars witing for the traffic lights, which leads to at the waste of time. if all people go to work by bus, there will no traffic jam in my way to go to work.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.5
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 4.0
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Language Use and Grammar: 3.5
2. 预估分数
25. 3 任务完成度
总体来说,你的文章回答了问题并表达了自己的观点。但是,为了更好地完成任务,你可以在以下方面进行改进:
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提供更多详细的例子和论据来支持你的观点。
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注意语法和词汇的准确性,避免出现错误。
示例1(改进前):I am accustomed to going to my law offices by my car, and there always exists lots of cars witing for the traffic lights, which leads to at the waste of time. 示例1(改进后):I usually drive to my law office, and I often encounter heavy traffic with numerous cars waiting at traffic lights, which results in a significant waste of time.
示例2(改进前):if all people go to work by bus, there will no traffic jam in my way to go to work. 示例2(改进后):If everyone commutes by bus instead of using their personal vehicles, it would significantly reduce traffic congestion on my daily route to work.
4. 文章结构与组织
从结构和组织方面来看,你的文章基本上是清晰的。然而,在以下方面还有待提高:
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使用恰当的过渡词或短语来连接不同段落和观点。
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在文章开头部分简要介绍主题,并在结尾部分总结观点。
示例1(改进前):I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on the reduction of traffic jam. 示例1(改进后):I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on reducing traffic congestion. To illustrate this point, I will provide a personal example.
示例2(改进前):to be more specific, through having free access to the public transportation, people are tended to commute by public transportation like buses, inevitably leading to the low frequency of personal cars. 示例2(改进后):To be more specific, when people have free access to public transportation such as buses, they are more likely to use it for commuting. This would inevitably lead to a decrease in the number of personal cars on the road and ultimately reduce traffic congestion.
5. 语法批改
I firmly believe that public transportation should be free, primarily due to its positive effect on the reduction of traffic jam. toTo(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) be more specific, through having free access to the public transportation, people are tended to commute by public transportation like buses, inevitably leading to the low frequency of personal cars. After that, there are less and less private cars getting jammed in the street roads. One supporting example is my personal commuting experience. I am accustomed to going to my law offices by my car, and there always exists lots of cars witingwriting(misspelling) for the traffic lights, which leads to at the waste of time. ifIf(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter) all people go to work by bus, there will no traffic jam in my way to go to work.
Section Title: 6 Article Revision
I am a strong advocate for making public transportation free, as it can significantly contribute to alleviating traffic congestion. By providing complimentary access to public transit systems such as buses, people would be more inclined to utilize these services instead of relying on their personal vehicles. Consequently, this would result in fewer cars on the road and a reduction in traffic jams. Drawing from my own experience, I often drive to my law office and frequently encounter long waits at traffic lights due to the high volume of cars on the streets. If more individuals opted for public transportation instead of driving, it would undoubtedly lead to a smoother and more efficient commute for everyone. (120 words)
I firmly believe that am a strong advocate for making public transportation should free (revised for a more natural tone), as it can significantly contribute to alleviating traffic congestion (rephrased for clarity). By providing complimentary access (changed "free" to "complimentary" to avoid repetition) to public transit systems such as buses, people would be free, primarily due more inclined (rephrased for a natural tone) to its positive effect utilize these services instead of relying on their personal vehicles. Consequently, this would result in fewer cars on the road and a reduction of in traffic jam. to be more specific, through having free access to the public transportation, people are tended to commute by public transportation like buses, inevitably leading to the low frequency of personal cars. After that, there are less and less private cars getting jammed in the street roads. One supporting example is jams (rephrased for clarity). Drawing from my personal commuting experience. own experience (added transition for better flow), I am accustomed to going often drive to my law offices by my car, office and there always exists lots frequently encounter long waits at traffic lights due to the high volume of cars witing on the streets (revised sentence structure for the traffic lights, which leads clarity). If more individuals opted for public transportation instead of driving, it would undoubtedly lead to at the waste of time. if all people go to work by bus, there will no traffic jam in my way to go to work.a smoother and more efficient commute for everyone (rephrased for a natural tone).
Display title: 8 思维导图
Mindmap:
1. Introduction
- Public transportation
- Free access
2. Alleviating traffic congestion
- Less reliance on personal vehicles
- Fewer cars on the road
3. Personal experience
- Driving to law office
- Traffic jams and long waits at traffic lights
4. Benefits of public transportation usage
- Smoother and more efficient commute for everyone
Display title: 9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| advocate | /ˈædvəkət/ | noun | a person who supports or recommends something | 提倡者 | I am a strong advocate for making public transportation free. |
| alleviate | /əˈliːvi.eɪt/ | verb | to make something less severe | 减轻 | Free public transportation can significantly alleviate traffic congestion. |
| complimentary | /ˌkɒmplɪˈmentəri/ | adjective | given or supplied free of charge | 免费的 | By providing complimentary access to public transit systems, people would be more inclined to use them. |
| congestion | /kənˈdʒestʃən/ | noun | -the state of being too full or overcrowded | -a situation in which there is too much traffic on the roads | -拥挤;堵塞 |
| -Drawing from my own experience, I often encounter traffic congestion during my commute. | |||||
| inclined | /ɪnˈklaɪnd/ | adjective | having a tendency or preference | 倾向于 | People would be more inclined to utilize public transportation if it were free. |
| efficient | /ɪˈfɪʃənt/ | adjective | -working or operating quickly and effectively without wasting time, effort, or energy | -using resources such as time, materials, or energy well without wasting any | -高效的;有效率的 |
| -An efficient public transportation system can greatly improve the quality of life in a city. | |||||
| undoubtedly | /ʌnˈdaʊtɪdli/ | adverb | without doubt; certainly | 无疑地 | Undoubtedly, free public transportation would lead to a smoother and more efficient commute for everyone. |
| commute | /kəˈmjuːt/ | noun | -the journey between one's home and place of work on a regular basis | -a regular journey of some distance to and from your place of work | -通勤;上下班路程 |
| -Many people rely on public transportation for their daily commute. |
9用户样本 #9
Admittedly Kelly's viewpoint about the advantage of protecting our environment. is reasonable. However, I am inclined to agree more with Paul's opini...
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用户样本 #9
Admittedly Kelly's viewpoint about the advantage of protecting our environment. is reasonable. However, I am inclined to agree more with Paul's opini...
用户样本
Admittedly Kelly's viewpoint about the advantage of protecting our environment. is reasonable. However, I am inclined to agree more with Paul's opinion that use tax revenue to support public transportation will impose a financial burden on taxpayers. From my perspective, public transportation has a significate disadvantage of inconvenient. For instance, public transportation like buses and subways only can be used in particular lines, which means that people can not get to the places wherever they want by using the public transportation. Moreover, people have to wait for buses or subways, suggesting that it is not an efficient choice for people. In that case, people will still choose to drive by themselves, means that we can not achieve the desired results that decreasing the air pollution and cleaning the air of cities.
评估结果
1. 子项得分
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Relevance and Contribution to Discussion: 4.0
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Clarity and Elaboration of Viewpoint: 3.5
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Language Use and Grammar: 3.5
2. 预估分数
22. 3 任务完成度
这篇文章在回答问题方面做得不错,但仍有改进的空间。首先,你需要更清楚地表达自己的观点,并给出更多支持细节。此外,注意避免语法错误和使用恰当的词汇。
示例1(改进前):From my perspective, public transportation has a significate disadvantage of inconvenient. 示例1(改进后):From my perspective, public transportation has a significant disadvantage due to its inconvenience.
示例2(改进前):In that case, people will still choose to drive by themselves, means that we can not achieve the desired results that decreasing the air pollution and cleaning the air of cities. 示例2(改进后):In that case, people will still choose to drive by themselves, which means that we cannot achieve the desired results of decreasing air pollution and improving air quality in cities.
4. 文章结构与组织
文章的结构和组织方面可以加强。建议在开头部分简要介绍讨论的主题和你的观点,然后在正文部分详细阐述你的观点和论据。最后,在结尾部分总结你的论点并提出一个结论。
建议1(改进前):Admittedly Kelly's viewpoint about the advantage of protecting our environment. is reasonable. 建议1(改进后):While Kelly's viewpoint about the importance of protecting our environment is reasonable, I believe that using tax revenue to support public transportation may impose a financial burden on taxpayers.
建议2(改进前):From my perspective, public transportation has a significate disadvantage of inconvenient. 建议2(改进后):One significant disadvantage of public transportation is its inconvenience, which I will elaborate on in the following paragraphs.
5. 语法批改
AdmittedlyAdmittedly, Kelly's viewpoint about the advantage of protecting our environment.environment is reasonable. However, I am inclined to agree more with Paul's opinion that useusing tax revenue to support public transportation will impose a financial burden on taxpayers.
From my perspective, public transportation has a significatesignificant disadvantage of inconvenient. For instance, public transportation liketransportation, such as buses and subwayssubways, can only can be used inon particular lines, whichlines. This means that people can notcannot get to the places wherever they want by using theto go if they solely rely on public transportation. Moreover, people have to wait for buses or subways, suggesting that it is not an efficient choice for people.
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Title: 6 文章修订
While Kelly's viewpoint on the importance of protecting our environment is valid, I find myself more aligned with Paul's perspective that utilizing tax revenue to support public transportation may impose a financial burden on taxpayers.
In my opinion, one significant drawback of public transportation is its inconvenience. For example, buses and subways can only be used along specific routes, limiting people's ability to reach their desired destinations using public transit alone. Furthermore, individuals must wait for buses or subways to arrive, which can be time-consuming and inefficient.
Consequently, many people may still opt to drive themselves, preventing us from achieving the intended outcomes of reducing air pollution and improving urban air quality. (115 words)
Admittedly Revised essay: Title: 7 文章批改
While Kelly's viewpoint about on the advantage importance of protecting our environment. environment is reasonable. However, valid (reason: "Admittedly" sounds too hesitant, and "reasonable" is not as strong as "valid"), I am inclined to agree find myself more aligned with Paul's opinion perspective that use utilizing tax revenue to support public transportation will may impose a financial burden on taxpayers. taxpayers (reason: rephrased for clarity and natural tone).
From In my perspective, opinion, one significant drawback of public transportation has a significate disadvantage of inconvenient. is its inconvenience (reason: changed "significate disadvantage" to "significant drawback" for proper grammar and word choice). For instance, public transportation like example, buses and subways can only can be used in particular lines, which means that people can not get along specific routes, limiting people's ability to the places wherever they want by reach their desired destinations using the public transportation. Moreover, people have to transit alone (reason: rephrased for clarity). Furthermore, individuals must wait for buses or subways, suggesting that it is not an efficient choice subways to arrive, which can be time-consuming and inefficient (reason: rephrased for people. a more natural tone).
In that case, Consequently, many people will may still choose opt to drive by themselves, means that we can not achieve preventing us from achieving the desired results that decreasing the intended outcomes of reducing air pollution and cleaning the improving urban air of cities.quality (reason: rephrased for clarity and a more natural tone).
8 思维导图
1. 保护环境的重要性
- 减少空气污染
- 改善城市空气质量
2. 公共交通的不便
- 有限的路线
- 等待时间长
3. 税收支持公共交通的负担
- 对纳税人的影响
4. 私家车的使用仍然普遍
- 实现目标困难
9 关键词
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English definition | Simplified Chinese translation | Sample sentences |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| viewpoint | /ˈvjuːpɔɪnt/ | noun | a way of looking at or thinking about something | 观点 | Kelly's viewpoint on the importance of protecting our environment is valid. |
| inconvenience | /ˌɪnkənˈviːniəns/ | noun | something that causes trouble or difficulty | 不便 | One significant drawback of public transportation is its inconvenience. |
| route | /ruːt/ | noun | a way to get from one place to another | 路线 | Buses and subways can only be used along specific routes. |
| time-consuming | /taɪm kənˈsju mɪŋ/ | adjective | taking up a lot of time | 耗时的 | Waiting for buses or subways to arrive can be time-consuming and inefficient. |
| outcome | /ˈaʊtkʌm/ | noun | a result or effect of an action or event | 结果 | Many people may still opt to drive themselves, preventing us from achieving the intended outcomes. |
| air pollution | /ɛr pəˈlu ʃən/ | noun | contamination of the air by harmful substances | 空气污染 | Reducing air pollution is one of the main goals of promoting public transportation. |
| urban | /ˈɜr bən/ | adjective | relating to cities and the people who live in them | 城市的 | Improving urban air quality is another important aspect of environmental protection. |
| financial burden | /faɪˈnæn ʃəl ˈbɜr dn/ | noun | a heavy load of money that has to be paid or spent | 财政负担 | Utilizing tax revenue to support public transportation may impose a financial burden on taxpayers. |
| taxpayer | /ˈtækspeɪər/ | noun | a person who pays taxes to the government | 纳税人 | The financial burden on taxpayers should be considered when making decisions about public transportation. |
| destination | /dɛstəˈne ʃən/ | noun | the place someone is going or being sent to | 目的地 _ | Public transportation limits people's ability to reach their desired destinations using public transit alone._ |
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