TOEFL TPO 70 Speaking Task 2 Sample: The woman expresses her opinion about the plan described in the article. Briefly summarize the plan. Then state her opinion about the plan and explain the reasons she gives for holding that opinion.

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some instances where the speaker could improve their pronunciation to avoid confusion. For example, "upload" should be "uploaded," and "it's no room" should be "there's no room." To improve delivery, the speaker should practice proper pronunciation and work on maintaining a consistent pace throughout their response.

4. Topic Development The speaker provides a coherent and well-organized response, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there are some areas where the speaker could improve topic development. For instance, the speaker could provide more specific examples from the listening passage to support their points, such as mentioning the woman's desire for all books to be digitized. Additionally, the speaker should work on making smoother transitions between ideas to create a more cohesive response. Overall, practicing these skills will help improve topic development in future responses.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The university announced that they are going to remove the old books that are not borrowed from the shelves. The university announced plans to remove old, unused books from the shelves. (Simplified and clarified phrasing) This can create more space for new books and also the old books will be scanned and upload to the computer. This will create space for new books, and the old books will be scanned and uploaded to the library's website. (Corrected grammar and added specific detail) The woman agrees for the following reasons. The woman supports this plan for several reasons. (Improved phrasing) She believes that the shelves were packed with many old books and lots of people complained about it. She believes that overcrowded shelves with old books have caused complaints from many people. (Rephrased for clarity) Also there are piles of new books in the library office that are going to be loaded to the shelf but it's no room. Additionally, there are piles of new books waiting to be shelved, but there is no room for them. (Corrected grammar and improved phrasing) In addition, if students can make access to all the books online, it's much more easy since students can just sit in their dorm room and access all the books they need. Furthermore, providing online access to all books would make it easier for students, as they could access the materials they need from their dorm rooms. (Improved sentence structure and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university announced plans to remove old, unused books from the shelves. This will create space for new books, and the old books will be scanned and uploaded to the library's website. The woman supports this plan for several reasons. She believes that overcrowded shelves with old books have caused complaints from many people. Additionally, there are piles of new books waiting to be shelved, but there is no room for them. Furthermore, providing online access to all books would make it easier for students, as they could access the materials they need from their dorm rooms. By addressing these concerns and implementing the proposed changes, the university can improve the library experience for all students while ensuring that valuable resources remain accessible through digital means.

6. Mind Map

• University's plan

  • Remove old, unused books
  • Create space for new books
  • Digitize old books

• Woman's opinion

  • Supports the plan
  • Reasons:
    • Overcrowded shelves
    • Complaints from people
    • New books waiting to be shelved
    • Online access benefits

7. Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大部分都很清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高口语表达能力，建议练习更自然、流畅的发音和语速，并减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释女士持有这一观点的原因时，可以更详细地说明。例如，在提到图书馆空间不足时，可以具体描述新书如何受到影响；在谈到电子图书的便利性时，可以进一步解释为什么在线查阅对学生更有帮助。通过提供更多具体细节和例子，可以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The plan is that the school will implement the policy that the books that have not been borrowed in the past five years will be removed from the library and make the room for the new books and bring the old books into the Internet and students can check them at their leisure time. The plan involves the university implementing a policy to remove books that have not been borrowed in the past five years from the library, creating space for new books, and digitizing old books for students to access online at their convenience.（将原句拆分为多个子句，使表达更清晰。）

The women agree with the plan, there are two primary reasons. The woman agrees with the plan for two main reasons.（改进语法和表达。）

One reason is that she thinks that the shelf is pretty crowded, so piles of new books have no room to lay. One reason is that she believes the shelves are quite crowded, leaving no space for stacks of new books.（改进词汇和表达。）

Second reason is that it is easier to use the old books which are not frequently being borrowed from the library. The second reason is that it would be more convenient to access infrequently borrowed old books online.（改进语法和表达。）

We can stay in the draw room and it is easier to watch them and check them from the Internet. Students can stay in their dorm rooms and easily view and check these books on the internet.（改进词汇和表达。）

修订版（140字）：

The plan involves the university implementing a policy to remove books that have not been borrowed in the past five years from the library, creating space for new books, and digitizing old books for students to access online at their convenience. The woman agrees with the plan for two main reasons. One reason is that she believes the shelves are quite crowded, leaving no space for stacks of new books. The second reason is that it would be more convenient to access infrequently borrowed old books online. Students can stay in their dorm rooms and easily view and check these books on the internet.

6.思维导图

- Plan
  - University policy
  - Remove books (not borrowed in 5 years)
  - Create space for new books
  - Digitize old books

- Woman's opinion
  - Agrees with the plan
  - Reasons
    - Crowded shelves
    - Convenience of online access

- Students' benefits
  - Access from dorm rooms
  - Easy viewing and checking online

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 从交付方面来看，发言者的语音清晰，语速基本一致，仅有少量停顿。建议发言者在练习口语时注意控制停顿的频率，以使表达更流畅。此外，注意正确发音以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，发言者提供了一个连贯且组织良好的回答，并在回答中明确地阐述了文章中的计划、女士对计划的看法以及她持有这一观点的原因。为了进一步提高回答质量，建议在描述女士观点时更具体地引用听力材料中的细节。

5.语言使用

原文：The university plans to make change to the library's book. The university plans to make changes to the library's books.（将“change”改为复数形式“changes”，将“book”改为复数形式“books”，使句子更符合语法规则。） They want to remove some of the old books that have not been used for about five years and prepare space for the new books. They plan to remove some old books that haven't been used for about five years and create space for new books.（将“want”改为“plan”，使句子更正式；将“have not”缩写为“haven't”，使句子更自然；将“prepare”改为“create”，使句子更准确。） And the remote books will be scanned and uploaded on the school's website. Additionally, the removed books will be scanned and uploaded to the school's website.（将“remote”改为“removed”，使句子更准确；用“Additionally”替换“And”，使句子更连贯。） And the woman in the conversation thinks that's a timely change. The woman in the conversation believes this is a timely change.（用“The woman in the conversation believes”替换“And the woman in the conversation thinks”，使句子更连贯；用“this is a timely change”替换“that's a timely change”，使句子更自然。） While she is working in the library, she found that the shelves of the books are crowded with the old books and the new books are not available. While working in the library, she noticed that the shelves were crowded with old books, making new books unavailable.（将“she is”改为“she”，使句子更简洁；将“found”改为“noticed”，使句子更自然；将“the shelves of the books are crowded with the old books and the new books are not available”改为“the shelves were crowded with old books, making new books unavailable”，使句子更连贯。） So she thinks with this kind of change, the new books will have space to be borrowed. She believes that this change will provide space for new books to be borrowed.（用“She believes that this change will provide space for new books to be borrowed”替换“So she thinks with this kind of change, the new books will have space to be borrowed”，使句子更连贯。） And at the same time, the scanned books are much more easier for readers to use because students do not have to go to the library and carry the book around. Simultaneously, scanned books will be much easier for readers to use since students won't have to visit the library and carry physical books around.（用“Simultaneously”替换“And at the same time”，使句子更连贯；将“are much more easier”改为“will be much easier”，使句子更自然；将“do not have to”改为“won't have to”，使句子更简洁；用“visit the library and carry physical books around”替换“go to the library and carry the book around”，使句子更准确。） They only have to do is to stay in their room and read. All they need to do is stay in their rooms and read.（用“All they need to do is stay in their rooms and read”替换“They only have to do is to stay in their room and read”，使句子更自然。） And she thinks it will be much better if all the books can be scanned or digitalized. She also believes that it would be even better if all books could be scanned or digitized.（用“She also believes that it would be even better if all books could be scanned or digitized”替换“And she thinks it will be much better if

6.思维导图

- University Library Changes
  - Remove old books
    - Not used for five years
    - Create space for new books
  - Digitize removed books
    - Upload to the website
  - Woman's opinion
    - Timely change
      - Shelves crowded with old books
      - New books unavailable
    - Benefits of digitization
      - Easier access for students
      - No need to visit the library and carry physical books
    - Suggestion for improvement
      - Digitize all books

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

总体来说，发言者的表达清晰，语速适中，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。为了提高发言的流畅度，请注意在适当的地方停顿，并确保发音准确。

4.话题发展 发言者对文章中的计划进行了简要概述，并阐述了女士对计划的看法及其理由。然而，回答中存在一些组织上的问题。建议在回答时更加关注逻辑结构和连贯性，以便更清晰地传达观点。同时，可以尝试提供更多细节和例子来支持观点。

5.语言使用

Original: The woman thinks the measure is a practical one. The woman believes the plan is practical. (将“measure”改为“plan”，使表达更准确。)

Original: First off, she thinks that the new booths which don't go to shelves is a waste of resource. Firstly, she believes that not placing new books on the shelves is a waste of resources. (调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。)

Original: Because last year when she helped the library, she saw a pile of new books crowded in the office but didn't go to the shelves so the students can't get good use of them. This is because last year, when she assisted at the library, she noticed a pile of new books in the office that were not placed on shelves, preventing students from utilizing them effectively. (调整句子结构，使表达更连贯。)

Original: Besides, she thinks that these old books which can be accessed online offers students an easier option to look through these old books because they won't go to the library and maybe can sit in the dormitory to read these books. Additionally, she thinks that digitizing old books provides students with an easier option to access them since they can read them from their dormitories without visiting the library. (调整句子结构，使表达更清晰。)

Revised answer (140 words):

The woman believes the plan is practical. Firstly, she believes that not placing new books on the shelves is a waste of resources. This is because last year, when she assisted at the library, she noticed a pile of new books in the office that were not placed on shelves, preventing students from utilizing them effectively. Additionally, she thinks that digitizing old books provides students with an easier option to access them since they can read them from their dormitories without visiting the library.

6.思维导图

• Plan
  • Practical
    • New books
      • Waste of resources
      • Not on shelves
      • Students can't utilize effectively
    • Digitizing old books
      • Easier access
      • Read from dormitories
      • No need to visit the library

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，但仍有改进的空间。建议在发音和语调上多加练习，以便更自然地表达观点。此外，注意避免不必要的停顿，以保持语言流畅。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上涵盖了文章和听力中的关键信息，并提供了一定程度的支持。但是，在组织结构和连接思路方面还有待加强。建议在准备过程中更加注重逻辑结构和信息呈现的顺序，确保回答内容更加连贯和有条理。

5.语言使用

原文：The university wants to remove the books which haven't been used for a long time. The university plans to remove books that have not been borrowed in the past five years.（将“which haven't been used for a long time”替换为“that have not been borrowed in the past five years”，使表达更准确。）

First off, it can make some spaces for the new books which can be used in the future. This will create space for new books that will be acquired in the future.（将“it can make some spaces”替换为“This will create space”，使表达更自然；将“which can be used in the future”替换为“that will be acquired in the future”，使表达更准确。）

Besides, the university wants to digitize these books in the website, Additionally, the university intends to digitize these books on their website,（将“Besides”替换为“Additionally”，使过渡更自然；将“in the website”替换为“on their website”，使表达更准确。）

and students can read these books on the computer. allowing students to access them electronically.（将“and students can read these books on the computer”替换为“allowing students to access them electronically”，使表达更自然。）

In the conversation, the woman likes this idea. In the conversation, the woman supports this plan.（将“likes this idea”替换为“supports this plan”，使表达更准确。）

First off, she thinks it is really crowded in the library shelves, so the library complained a lot about this. Firstly, she believes that the library shelves are overcrowded, causing complaints from users.（将“it is really crowded in the library shelves, so the library complained a lot about this”替换为“the library shelves are overcrowded, causing complaints from users”，使表达更自然。）

Besides, she thinks it is a good choice to make these books online, Moreover, she considers digitizing these books to be a good decision,（将“Besides”替换为“Moreover”，使过渡更自然；将“make these books online”替换为“digitizing these books”，使表达更准确。）

and students won't have to be to the library, as it eliminates the need for students to physically visit the library,（将“and students won't have to be to the library”替换为“as it eliminates the need for students to physically visit the library”，使表达更自然。）

and she hopes all the books can be made digitalized one day. and she hopes that all books will be digitized eventually.（将“can be made digitalized one day”替换为“will be digitized eventually”，使表达更自然。）

修订版（140词）：

The university plans to remove books that have not been borrowed in the past five years. This will create space for new books that will be acquired in the future. Additionally, the university intends to digitize these books on their website, allowing students to access them electronically. In the conversation, the woman supports this plan. Firstly, she believes that the library shelves are overcrowded, causing complaints from users. Moreover, she considers digitizing these books to be a good decision, as it eliminates the need for students to physically visit the library and provides easier access to resources. She also hopes that all books will be digitized eventually, making the library more efficient and user-friendly.

6.思维导图

- University Plan
  - Remove books
    - Not borrowed in past five years
  - Create space
    - New books
  - Digitize books
    - Accessible on website

- Woman's Opinion
  - Supports plan
    - Overcrowded shelves
      - Complaints from users
    - Digitization benefits
      - No need for physical library visits
      - Easier access to resources
  - Hopes for future
    - All books digitized eventually

7.关键词

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, with a consistent pace and only occasional pauses. However, there are some minor issues with punctuation and pronunciation that could be improved. For example, the speaker could work on enunciating words more clearly and using appropriate pauses to make the speech easier to understand. Additionally, practicing pronunciation can help reduce any spelling errors that may arise from inaccurate pronunciation.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas and sufficient support or examples. However, there is room for improvement in terms of providing more specific details from the listening passage to better support the woman's opinion. The speaker could also work on making smoother transitions between ideas to enhance the overall flow of the response. By incorporating these suggestions, the speaker can further improve their topic development skills for future speaking tasks.

5. Language Use

Original: The university is planning to move some infrequently borrowed books to the other shelves and save some space for new books. The university plans to remove infrequently borrowed books from the shelves to make space for new ones. (Simplified and clarified the sentence structure)

Original: And those infrequently borrowed books will be digitalized, scanned, and put online so that way the students can easily access those books online. These books will be digitized and made available online, allowing students easy access. (Reduced redundancy and improved sentence structure)

Original: And the woman really likes this plan. The woman strongly supports this plan. (Used more advanced vocabulary)

Original: Firstly, she agreed that it is pretty crowded over the shelves in the libraries for a long time. First, she agrees that the library shelves have been overcrowded for quite some time. (Improved grammar and word choice)

Original: That would be a practical move for the university to save some more spaces for the new books, which has been stacked in the offices for a long time. This would be a practical solution to create space for new books that have been stored in offices for an extended period. (Enhanced sentence structure and clarity)

Original: Secondly, people can now have the online access easily to the infrequently borrowed books and they don't have to carry them around. Second, students can now access these books online with ease, eliminating the need to carry them physically. (Improved grammar and sentence structure)

Original: They can just stay at the dorm and then visit online. They can simply access the books from their dormitories or any other location with internet access. (Clarified the statement and added a strong conclusion)

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university plans to remove infrequently borrowed books from the shelves to make space for new ones. These books will be digitized and made available online, allowing students easy access. The woman strongly supports this plan. First, she agrees that the library shelves have been overcrowded for quite some time. This would be a practical solution to create space for new books that have been stored in offices for an extended period. Second, students can now access these books online with ease, eliminating the need to carry them physically. They can simply access the books from their dormitories or any other location with internet access. By incorporating these improvements in language use, the speaker's response demonstrates advanced vocabulary, proper grammar, natural flow of statements, smooth transitions, and a strong conclusion.

6. Mind Map

- University Plan
  - Remove infrequently borrowed books
  - Create space for new books

- Digitization
  - Books available online
  - Easy access for students

- Woman's Opinion
  - Strong support for the plan
  - Reasons:
    - Overcrowded library shelves
    - Practical solution for space issues
    - Online access eliminates physical carrying of books
    - Convenience of accessing from any location with internet access

7. Key Words

1. Sub Scores

• Delivery: 3

• Topic Development: 3

• Language Use: 3

2. Estimated Scores

• Total Score: 23

3. Delivery The speaker's delivery is generally clear and fluid, but there are some occasional pauses that could be improved. To enhance the delivery, the speaker should practice speaking more consistently and reducing unnecessary pauses. Additionally, focusing on accurate pronunciation will help eliminate any potential spelling errors.

4. Topic Development The response is coherent and well-organized, with clear connections between ideas. However, the speaker could provide more specific examples or details to further support their points. To improve topic development, the speaker should consider elaborating on the benefits of digitizing books and how it would impact students' access to resources.

5. Language Use

Original Answer: The reading passage announces a change on campus. However, the books which haven't been borrowed in the past five years will be removed from the library bookshelf. The reading passage announces a change on campus: books that haven't been borrowed in the past five years will be removed from the library shelves. (Removed "However" and combined sentences for a smoother flow) Also, these books will be scanned into electronic books. Additionally, these books will be digitized. (Rephrased for clarity and conciseness) The woman in the conversation is in favor of this idea. She starts off by saying that she is also a librarian who works here. She had already found out that a lot of books which have been borrowed is very old and it's a shame that there's no place for other new books to come into the library. She thinks that it's a good idea to scan these books electronic because people don't need to go to libraries and just read these books in their classroom and houses. She believes that digitizing these books is beneficial as it allows people to access them without visiting the library, enabling them to read from their classrooms or homes. (Rephrased for clarity and improved sentence structure) She also suggests that it's a good idea to scan all these books into electronic. Furthermore, she suggests digitizing all the books in the library. (Rephrased for conciseness and clarity)

Revised Answer (140 words): The reading passage announces a change on campus: books that haven't been borrowed in the past five years will be removed from the library shelves. Additionally, these books will be digitized. The woman in the conversation is in favor of this idea. She starts off by saying that she is also a librarian who works there. She had already found out that many of the borrowed books are very old, and it's a shame that there's no space for new books to be added to the library. She believes that digitizing these books is beneficial as it allows people to access them without visiting the library, enabling them to read from their classrooms or homes. Furthermore, she suggests digitizing all the books in the library.

6. Mind Map

- Change on campus
  - Removal of infrequently borrowed books
  - Digitization of removed books

- Woman's opinion
  - In favor of the idea
  - Reasons:
    - Librarian perspective
    - Old books taking up space
    - Accessibility without visiting the library
    - Reading from classrooms or homes
  - Suggestion:
    - Digitize all library books

7. Key Words

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的发音和语速大体上是清晰和流畅的，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。为了提高交付效果，建议练习更自然地连接句子，减少不必要的停顿。同时注意正确发音，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在解释女士观点原因时可以更详细。为了提高主题发展，建议在解释女士观点原因时提供更多具体的例子或论据，以使回答更加充实和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The university library plans to remove the books that haven't been borrowed by the last five years next semester and make the books digitalized to create some new place for new books. The university library plans to remove books that haven't been borrowed in the last five years and digitize them to create space for new books next semester.（将“by”改为“in”，使句子更自然；将“make the books digitalized”改为“digitize them”，使句子更简洁。）

The woman agreed that this is a good way to solve the problem since that she thought the books in the library was so crowded and new books that were newly bought have no place to be placed. The woman agrees that this is a good solution because she believes the library is overcrowded with books, and there is no space for newly acquired ones.（将“agreed”改为“agrees”，使时态一致；删除“since that”，使句子更简洁；将“the books in the library was so crowded”改为“the library is overcrowded with books”，使句子更自然。）

And she thinks that making the book online may be a good access for students since that they can easier use the books and don't need to go to the library or carry the heavy books and she wished that that could be done to all books. She also thinks that making books available online would provide easier access for students, as they wouldn't need to visit the library or carry heavy books, and she wishes this could be done for all books.（删除“since that”，使句子更简洁；将“easier use the books”改为“provide easier access”，使句子更自然；将“wished”改为“wishes”，使时态一致。）

修订后的回答（140词）：

The university library plans to remove books that haven't been borrowed in the last five years and digitize them to create space for new books next semester. The woman agrees that this is a good solution because she believes the library is overcrowded with books, and there is no space for newly acquired ones. She also thinks that making books available online would provide easier access for students, as they wouldn't need to visit the library or carry heavy books, and she wishes this could be done for all books.

6.思维导图

- University Library Plan
  - Remove books
    - Not borrowed in last 5 years
  - Digitize books
    - Create space for new books

- Woman's Opinion
  - Agrees with the plan
    - Overcrowded library
    - No space for new books
  - Online access benefits
    - Easier access for students
    - No need to visit library or carry heavy books
    - Wishes it could be done for all books

7.关键词

1.子项得分

• 交付：3

• 主题发展：3.5

• 语言使用：3

2.预估分数

• 总分：23

3.表达 回答中的语音清晰，但在某些地方存在不必要的停顿。建议练习更连贯、自然的语音表达，以便在考试中更好地展示自己的英语水平。同时，注意发音准确性，避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 回答内容基本上符合题目要求，但在组织结构和连接词方面还有待加强。建议在准备过程中多加练习，使回答更加条理清晰。同时，在给出原因时尽量提供具体的例子或者详细的解释，以增强说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：The university has proposed new policies that all the books that have not been borrowed for over 5 years should be removed from the library shelves and be changed into digital versions in case someone may need them someday. The university has proposed a new policy stating that books not borrowed for over five years should be removed from library shelves and converted into digital versions for future use.（将复数形式的“policies”改为单数形式的“policy”，使句子更自然。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更简洁易懂。）

The girl in the conversation totally agreed with this idea because firstly, he thinks that the current shelves are crowded with piles of books and what's more, new books that have been bought by the university have no place to be put on, so it's wise to remove the old books. The woman in the conversation completely agrees with this idea, stating that the current shelves are overcrowded with books, and there is no space for new acquisitions. Therefore, removing old books is a wise decision.（将“girl”改为“woman”，使表达更礼貌。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更简洁易懂。）

Second, it is more convenient because she can refer to these books even in her dorm. Secondly, she finds it more convenient as she can access these books even from her dormitory.（将“refer”改为“access”，使表达更准确。同时，对句子进行了简化，使其更简洁易懂。）

She even suggests that all books should be changed into an electronic version because they are very convenient and effective. She even suggests converting all books into electronic versions due to their convenience and effectiveness.（对句子进行了简化，使其更简洁易懂。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university has proposed a new policy stating that books not borrowed for over five years should be removed from library shelves and converted into digital versions for future use. The woman in the conversation completely agrees with this idea, stating that the current shelves are overcrowded with books, and there is no space for new acquisitions. Therefore, removing old books is a wise decision. Secondly, she finds it more convenient as she can access these books even from her dormitory. She even suggests converting all books into electronic versions due to their convenience and effectiveness.

6.思维导图

• University policy

  • Remove books
    • Not borrowed for over five years
  • Convert to digital versions

• Woman's opinion

  • Agrees with the policy
    • Reasons
      • Overcrowded shelves
      • No space for new acquisitions
      • Convenience of digital access
      • Effectiveness of electronic versions

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答相对清晰，语速较为稳定。但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿，建议在练习时注意保持流利度和连贯性。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上符合题目要求，能够简要概括文章中的计划，并阐述了女生对计划的看法及理由。但在组织结构上还有待加强，可以尝试使用更明确的连接词和过渡句子来使回答更加连贯。同时，在提供理由时可以尝试给出更具体的例子或细节来支持观点。

5.语言使用

原文：It looks like there's a change on the university campus. The university library is planning a change. (原句表述不够准确，改为更明确的描述) You see, the university library proposes that some books which haven't been borrowed within five years will be removed from the bookshelf. The library plans to remove books that haven't been borrowed in the past five years from the shelves. (简化句子结构，使表述更清晰) Right off the bat, Immediately, (使用更正式的表达方式) this idea has garnered support from a famous student. the woman in the conversation supports this idea. (避免使用不相关的信息，如“著名学生”) Firstly, she argues that when she worked at the library, she found that the bookshelves were packed with books, which caused problems because the piles of books were in the office and there was no room for the new books the students needed. First, she mentions her experience working at the library and how overcrowded bookshelves made it difficult to accommodate new books needed by students. (简化句子结构，使表述更清晰) Secondly, she also argues that the online book resource allows students to access the book much easier because they don't have to carry it everywhere and they just need to sit at the dormitory and read it. Second, she believes that digitizing books will make them more accessible for students, as they can read them from their dormitories without having to carry physical copies. (改进句子结构，使表述更自然)

修订版（140词）：

The university library is planning a change. The library plans to remove books that haven't been borrowed in the past five years from the shelves. Immediately, the woman in the conversation supports this idea. First, she mentions her experience working at the library and how overcrowded bookshelves made it difficult to accommodate new books needed by students. Second, she believes that digitizing books will make them more accessible for students, as they can read them from their dormitories without having to carry physical copies.

6.思维导图

- University library change
  - Remove books
    - Not borrowed in past five years
  - Woman's opinion
    - Supports the idea
      - Overcrowded bookshelves
        - Difficult to accommodate new books
      - Digitizing books
        - More accessible for students
          - Read from dormitories
          - No need to carry physical copies

7.关键词

1.子项得分 Delivery: 3 Topic Development: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数

23. 3.表达

从表达方面来看，这位同学的回答基本清晰，但在某些地方存在一些不必要的停顿。建议在练习时注意保持语速的一致性，尽量减少不必要的停顿。同时，注意发音的准确性，以避免拼写错误。

4.话题发展 从话题发展方面来看，这位同学的回答基本上是连贯和有组织的，但在某些地方可以进一步完善。例如，在描述女生观点时可以更具体地说明她为什么认为这个计划是个好主意。另外，在提供原因时尽量使用恰当的连接词，使得回答更加流畅。练习时可以多关注这些方面以提高话题发展水平。

5.语言使用

Original: The university has a proposal that the books which are not being borrowed in the past five years should be removed from the shelves. The university has proposed that books not borrowed in the past five years be removed from the shelves.（将句子结构简化，使其更自然。）

Original: Firstly, it could create spaces for new books. First, this would create space for new books.（使用“First”而不是“Firstly”，并改用“this would”使句子更自然。）

Original: Secondly, the old books will be scanned to become electronic books. Second, the old books will be digitized and turned into electronic books.（使用“Second”而不是“Secondly”，并使用“digitized and turned into”使句子更准确。）

Original: And the woman thinks that it is a great idea. The woman believes that this plan is excellent.（使用“believes”和“excellent”使句子更自然。）

Original: Firstly, she said that it is worked last year. First, she mentioned that it worked well last year.（使用“First”而不是“Firstly”，并改用“mentioned that it worked well”使句子更自然。）

Original: And the shelf in the library is really crowded. She also pointed out that the library shelves are quite crowded.（使用“also pointed out”使句子更自然。）

Original: And there are a lot of books the offices have bought. Many books have been purchased by the offices.（简化句子结构，使其更自然。）

Original: And there are no rooms for them to places. However, there is no space to place them.（改用“However, there is no space”使句子更自然。）

Original: And so many people want to watch them. Many people are interested in accessing these books.（使用“interested in accessing”使句子更准确。）

Original: And none of people want to watch other books. Few people are interested in the less popular books.（使用“Few people are interested in”使句子更自然。）

Original: Secondly, the online book is really great. Second, having access to electronic books is highly beneficial.（使用“having access to electronic books is highly beneficial”使句子更准确。）

Original: Because it is easier to use, students needn't go to the library. This is because they are more convenient, allowing students to access them without visiting the library.（改用“more convenient, allowing students to access them without visiting the library”使句子更自然。）

Original: They only need to live in the dormitory and could get all the books. Students can simply access these books from their dormitories.（简化句子结构，使其更自然。）

Revised Answer (140 words):

The university has proposed that books not borrowed in the past five years be removed from the shelves. First, this would create space for new books. Second, the old books will be digitized and turned into electronic books. The woman believes that this plan is excellent. First, she mentioned that it worked well last year. She also pointed out that the library shelves are quite crowded. Many books have been purchased by the offices, but there is no space to place them. Many people are interested in accessing these books, while few people are interested in the less popular ones. Second, having access to electronic books is highly beneficial. This is because they are more convenient, allowing students to access them without visiting the library.

6.思维导图

- University Proposal
  - Remove books not borrowed in past 5 years
  - Create space for new books
  - Digitize old books into electronic books

- Woman's Opinion
  - Excellent plan
    - Worked well last year
    - Library shelves crowded
    - Many books purchased by offices, no space to place them
    - Interest in accessing new books, less interest in unpopular ones
  - Benefits of electronic books
    - Convenient access without visiting library
    - Accessible from dormitories

7.关键词