TOEFL Speaking Task 3 Sample: Explain how the example of vervet monkeys from the lecture illustrates the of alarm calls.

1.子项得分

• 交付：2

• 语言使用：2

• 话题发展：2

2.预估分数

• 总分：18

3.表达 在表达方面，发言者的语速较快，导致部分句子不够清晰。建议发言者在表达时适当放慢语速，并注意控制停顿，以便让听众更好地理解所表达的内容。此外，发言者在发音方面也需要加强练习，以提高准确度。

4.话题发展 在话题发展方面，发言者对于阅读和听力材料的总结较为简略，没有充分展示对于材料的理解。建议发言者在回答问题时更加详细地描述阅读和听力材料中的内容，并尝试提供更多相关的例子来支持观点。同时，注意保持回答的条理性和连贯性，使得整个回答更加完整和有说服力。

5.语言使用

原文：Some cores promote the survival of groups, but sometimes it conveys a deceptive message to other members of the group, and the professor gave an example. The warped monkey, they always move in groups to find food and share it. Sometimes when some of them find leopards, just a screeching noise, and even others don't see the leopards, they gather and keep from the safe. However, once a monkey found some fruits, and it's just screeching, and the other members gathered to keep safe. However, the researchers didn't find any neighbors in the area, and the preserved monkey just stand alone and eat all the fruits by itself.

修正后：Alarm calls usually promote group survival; however, they can sometimes convey deceptive messages to other group members, as illustrated by the professor's example. Vervet monkeys typically move in groups to search for food and share it among themselves. When one of them spots a leopard, it emits a screeching noise that alerts others who haven't seen the leopard yet. Consequently, they all gather and seek safety. In one instance, a monkey found some fruit and started screeching. The other monkeys gathered for safety, but there was no leopard in sight. The researchers observed that the screeching monkey remained alone and consumed all the fruit by itself. (将语句结构进行了调整，使其更加清晰；修正了一些词汇错误，如“warped monkey”改为“vervet monkeys”；改进了语法，如将“it's just screeching”改为“it started screeching”。)

修订版（140词）：

Alarm calls usually promote group survival; however, they can sometimes convey deceptive messages to other group members, as illustrated by the professor's example. Vervet monkeys typically move in groups to search for food and share it among themselves. When one of them spots a leopard, it emits a screeching noise that alerts others who haven't seen the leopard yet. Consequently, they all gather and seek safety. In one instance, a monkey found some fruit and started screeching. The other monkeys gathered for safety, but there was no leopard in sight. The researchers observed that the screeching monkey remained alone and consumed all the fruit by itself. This example demonstrates how alarm calls can be used deceptively to reduce competition for resources within a group, highlighting the complexity of animal communication.

6.思维导图

• Alarm Calls

  • Group survival
  • Deceptive messages

• Vervet Monkeys

  • Move in groups
  • Share food

• Screeching Noise

  • Alert others
  • Seek safety

• Deceptive Use

  • Reduce competition
  • Consume resources

7.关键词