TOEFL TPO 62 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.
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题目概览
阅读段落
Throughout the world's oceans, hard structures such as natural reefs provide ideal marine habitats Reefs provide hard surfaces to which plants, coral and sponges can attach: and thereby provide food and shelter for many types of fish. Recently, workers in the fishing industry have tried to increase the amount of suitable habitat for fish by constructing artificial reefs from old metal objects and industrial materials and placing them in coastal waters. Artificial reefs have several benefits. Artificial reefs can also improve the economic competitiveness of small‐scale fishers. This is possible because small‐scale fishers are able to create their own private artificial reefs in secret locations only they know. Currently, small‐scale fishers struggle to compete with larger corporations because fishing grounds are limited in number and most are known to everyone. Creating fishing areas known only to the fishers who make them will help independent fishers support themselves and their local communities. Next, some asteroids are rich in valuable elements and precious metals that are relatively rare on Earth, such as gold and platinum. An asteroid colony would be extremely profitable and a good source of these raw materials. The colonists or businesses sponsoring them could more than pay for the cost of their support by mining minerals and sending them back to Earth. Finally, artificial reefs are a good way to recycle materials no longer needed for other purposes. Artificial reefs can be made from old cars and other objects that are otherwise difficult to dispose of Once these materials have been cleaned to ensure that no harmful chemicals remain, they can be placed in the ocean to serve as reefs for marine life Artificial reefs thus provide a relatively inexpensive, environmentally friendly way to reuse materials.
题目
Summarize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage.
用户样本与评估结果
用户样本
The passage claims that artificial reefs can benefit both the environment and some fishers through certain appraoches. However, the lecture argues that the problems of artificial reefs outweigh the advantages. Firstly, reports of increased catches within areas with artificial reefs does not neccessarily mean the population of some kind of fish increased. Since fish is naturally drawn to coral reefs, the artificial reefs may just attract fish from other places instead, which could also result in higher catches in these certain areas. While actually, the population remains the same. In addition, artificial reefs could cause a decrease in the population of fish instead of replenishing it. As artificial reefs draws large amount of fish to one place, it is easier for fisherman to catch these fish. Subsequently, the number of fish will drop. Secondly, creating private artificial reefs in locations unkown to the public may induce serious safety problems. Fishers' nets, for example, can be caught on the reefs and damage the reefs. Moreover, boats could crash into reefs in shallow waters, resulting in some degree of casualties. Therefore, the only way to avoid these problems is to publicize the locations of these artificial reefs. But then, small-scale fishers will not gain any profit from these reefs. Thus, this proposal is impracticable and unlikely to benefit anyone. Lastly, artificial reefs may cause damage to the environment rather than protecting it. For instance, artificial reefs called Osborne reefs, were taken apart by a storm. Those reefs were made from used car tires. When they crashed into the ocean floor, marine plants and animals were harmed. As a result, the ecosystem there was devastated.
评估结果
1.Sub Scores
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Task fulfillment: 4
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Organization: 4
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Coherence and Cohesion: 4
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Language Use: 4
2.Estimated Scores
- Estimated Score: 25
3.Task completeness The essay effectively summarizes the points made in the lecture and explains how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of clarity and elaboration on some points. For example, it would be helpful to explain why attracting fish from other areas could be problematic, as well as providing more details about the safety issues caused by secret artificial reefs.
Suggestions for improvement:
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Explain why attracting fish from other areas could be problematic.
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Provide more details about the safety issues caused by secret artificial reefs.
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"Since fish are naturally drawn to coral reefs, the artificial reefs may just attract fish from other places instead, which could lead to an imbalance in marine ecosystems and disrupt natural habitats."
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"Fishers' nets can be caught on the reefs and damage them, leading to potential harm to marine life. In shallow waters, boats could crash into reefs, resulting in not only damage to vessels but also potential injury or loss of life for those on board."
4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs addressing each point from the lecture, and a conclusion. The organization is logical with each paragraph focusing on a specific point and supporting details. However, there is room for improvement in terms of transitions between ideas and paragraphs.
Suggestions for improvement:
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Use clear transitions between ideas within paragraphs.
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Improve transitions between paragraphs to enhance coherence.
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"Firstly, reports of increased catches within areas with artificial reefs do not necessarily mean that overall populations of fish have grown larger. This is because fish are naturally drawn to coral reefs; thus, artificial reefs may simply attract fish from other places. In addition, this phenomenon could have negative consequences for the overall fish population."
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"Lastly, despite the potential benefits of recycling materials through artificial reefs, they may cause significant environmental damage. For example, the Osborne Reef, made from used car tires, was taken apart by a storm and caused harm to marine plants and animals when it crashed into the ocean floor. This demonstrates that even with good intentions, artificial reefs can have unintended negative consequences for marine ecosystems."
5. Grammar
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Secondly, creating private artificial reefs in locations unkownunknown(misspelling) to the public may induce serious safety problems. Fishers' nets, for example, can be caught on the reefs and damage the reefs. Moreover, boats could crash into reefs in shallow waters, resulting in some degree of casualties. Therefore, the only way to avoid these problems is to publicize the locations of these artificial reefs. But then, small-scale fishers will not gain any profit from these reefs. Thus, this proposal is impracticable and unlikely to benefit anyone.
Lastly, artificial reefs may cause damage to the environment rather than protecting it. For instance, artificial reefsreefs,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) called Osborne reefs, were taken apart by a storm. Those reefs were made from used car tires. When they crashed into the ocean floor, marine plants and animals were harmed. As a result, the ecosystem there was devastated.
- Revised Essay
The passage claims that artificial reefs can benefit both the environment and some fishers through certain approaches. However, the lecture argues that the problems of artificial reefs outweigh the advantages.
Firstly, reports of increased catches within areas with artificial reefs do not necessarily mean the population of some kind of fish increased. Since fish are naturally drawn to coral reefs, the artificial reefs may just attract fish from other places instead, which could also result in higher catches in these certain areas. While actually, the population remains the same. In addition, artificial reefs could cause a decrease in the population of fish instead of replenishing it. As artificial reefs draw a large amount of fish to one place, it is easier for fishermen to catch these fish. Subsequently, the number of fish will drop.
Secondly, creating private artificial reefs in locations unknown to the public may induce serious safety problems. Fishers' nets, for example, can be caught on the reefs and damage them. Moreover, boats could crash into reefs in shallow waters, resulting in some degree of casualties. Therefore, the only way to avoid these problems is to publicize the locations of these artificial reefs. But then, small-scale fishers will not gain any profit from these reefs. Thus, this proposal is impracticable and unlikely to benefit anyone.
Lastly, artificial reefs may cause damage to the environment rather than protecting it. For instance, artificial reefs called Osborne Reefs were taken apart by a storm. Those reefs were made from used car tires. When they crashed into the ocean floor, marine plants and animals were harmed. As a result, the ecosystem there was devastated. (275 words)
The passage claims that artificial reefs can benefit both the environment and some fishers through certain appraoches. approaches (changed "appraoches" to "approaches" for correct spelling). However, the lecture argues that the problems of artificial reefs outweigh the advantages.
Firstly, reports of increased catches within areas with artificial reefs does do not neccessarily necessarily (changed "neccessarily" to "necessarily" for correct spelling) mean the population of some kind of fish increased. Since fish is are (changed "is" to "are" for subject-verb agreement) naturally drawn to coral reefs, the artificial reefs may just attract fish from other places instead, which could also result in higher catches in these certain areas. While actually, the population remains the same. In addition, artificial reefs could cause a decrease in the population of fish instead of replenishing it. As artificial reefs draws draw (changed "draws" to "draw" for subject-verb agreement) a large amount of fish to one place, it is easier for fisherman fishermen (changed "fisherman" to "fishermen" for plural form) to catch these fish. Subsequently, the number of fish will drop.
Secondly, creating private artificial reefs in locations unkown unknown (changed "unkown" to "unknown" for correct spelling) to the public may induce serious safety problems. Fishers' nets, for example, can be caught on the reefs and damage the reefs. them (added "them" for clarity). Moreover, boats could crash into reefs in shallow waters, resulting in some degree of casualties. Therefore, the only way to avoid these problems is to publicize the locations of these artificial reefs. But then, small-scale fishers will not gain any profit from these reefs. Thus, this proposal is impracticable and unlikely to benefit anyone.
Lastly, artificial reefs may cause damage to the environment rather than protecting it. For instance, artificial reefs called Osborne reefs, Reefs (capitalized "Reefs" for consistency) were taken apart by a storm. Those reefs were made from used car tires. When they crashed into the ocean floor, marine plants and animals were harmed. As a result, the ecosystem there was devastated.
- Mind Map
- Introduction
- Artificial reefs: benefits vs. problems
- Point 1: Fish population
- Increased catches not equal to increased population
- Artificial reefs may decrease fish population
- Point 2: Safety and private artificial reefs
- Nets and boats can cause damage
- Publicizing locations negates benefits for small-scale fishers
- Point 3: Environmental damage
- Example: Osborne Reefs disaster
- Harm to marine plants and animals, ecosystem devastation
- Conclusion
- Key Words
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | English Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| replenish | rɪˈplɛnɪʃ | verb | to fill (something) up again | The lake was replenished by the rain. | |
| induce | ɪnˈdjuːs | verb | to cause (something) to happen or exist | The drug is used to induce sleep. | |
| impracticable | /ɪmˈpræktɪkəbəl/ | adjective | /not capable of being carried out or put into practice/ | / | /The plan is theoretically possible, but it is impracticable in the present circumstances./ |
| devastate | /ˈdɛvəˌsteɪt/ | /verb/ | /to destroy much or most of (something)/ | / | /The flood devastated the town./ |
| ecosystem | /ˈiːkoʊsɪstəm/ | /noun/ | /everything that exists in a particular environment/ | / | /The health of an entire ecosystem can be affected by changes to any part of it./ |
| subsequently | /ˈsʌbsɪkwəntli/ | /adverb/ | /happening or coming after something else/ | / | /She subsequently lost interest in the project./ |
| casualties | /ˈkæʒuəltiz/ | /noun/ | /people who are killed or injured in a war or disaster/ | / | /There were heavy casualties on both sides of the conflict./ |
| publicize | ˈpʌblɪsaɪz | verb | to cause (something) to be publicly known | The company publicized its new product. | |
| impracticable | ɪmˈpræktɪkəbəl | adjective | not capable of being carried out or put into practice | The plan is theoretically possible, but it is impracticable in the present circumstances. | |
| devastation | ˌdɛvəˈsteɪʃən | noun | great destruction or damage | The hurricane left a trail of devastation in its wake. |
- Revised Essay
The passage claims that artificial reefs can benefit both the environment and some fishers through certain approaches. However, the lecture argues that the problems of artificial reefs outweigh the advantages.
Firstly, reports of increased catches within areas with artificial reefs do not necessarily mean the population of some kind of fish increased. Since fish are naturally drawn to coral reefs, the artificial reefs may just attract fish from other places instead, which could also result in higher catches in these certain areas. While actually, the population remains the same. In addition, artificial reefs could cause a decrease in the population of fish instead of replenishing it. As artificial reefs draw a large amount of fish to one place, it is easier for fishermen to catch these fish. Subsequently, the number of fish will drop.
Secondly, creating private artificial reefs in locations unknown to the public may induce serious safety problems. Fishers' nets, for example, can be caught on the reefs and damage them. Moreover, boats could crash into reefs in shallow waters, resulting in some degree of casualties. Therefore, the only way to avoid these problems is to publicize the locations of these artificial reefs. But then, small-scale fishers will not gain any profit from these reefs. Thus, this proposal is impracticable and unlikely to benefit anyone.
Lastly, artificial reefs may cause damage to the environment rather than protecting it. For instance, artificial reefs called Osborne Reefs were taken apart by a storm. Those reefs were made from used car tires. When they crashed into the ocean floor, marine plants and animals were harmed. As a result, the ecosystem there was devastated.
