TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Your response will be on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response persents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words
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阅读段落
Scientists have long believed that bees existed up to some 200 million years ago. This notion has recently come under some speculation because of a lack of any significant evidence to support this theory. Key missing evidence includes fossil records, the lack of flowering plants to support bee life, and recently revealed discrepancies in the fossil record. To date, the oldest known bee discovered is a 100 million-year-old specimen preserved in amber. This ancient specimen, trapped in tree resin, is at least 35-45 million years older than any other known bee fossil. What is concerning scientists is the lack of any fossil evidence older than 100 million years. Fossil records for other plant, animal and insect species are quite complete, however, the bee is missing a similarly lengthy record. The ancient world lacked flowering plants. This is important because bees are pollen-dependent and rely on flower pollen and nectar for energy, protein and other nutrients. Flora in the ancient world 200 million years ago were mostly dominated by conifers which did not flower or produce the pollen and nectar necessary for bee survival. Lacking this food source, it is highly skeptical that bees could have existed 200 million years ago. Several of the fossil records being studied by scientists have also brought to light major discrepancies that exist between modern beehives and beehives of the ancient world. Specifically, ancient beehives seem to have a different organization and structure compared to that of modern beehives. This variance in evidence in the fossil record has led experts to speculate that these fossils are not fossils of beehives, but rather nests of another insect species.
题目
Your response will be on the basis of the quality of your writing and on how well your response persents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an effective response will be 150 to 225 words
用户样本与评估结果
用户样本
The reading and the lecture seperate over the idea whether the bees existed up to 200 million years ago. The professor provides several counterarguments against the reading, casting doubt on its point that the bees cannot exist up to such a long time because of insuffient evidence. Firstly, the proffessor argues that the fossils of other animals at that period are formed by layers and layers of sediments, so it is not that easy to disover a bee traped in tree resin. Thus, the statement in the reading that the missing similarly record of bees indicates the bees cannot exist at that time is challenged. Furthermore, while the professor acknowledges the flower pollen and nectar is a crucial food resource of the bees, he maintains that bees may have other food alternatives such as honey produced by trees including pines. So the bees can still gain the necessay nutrition without their access to flowering plants. Additionally, as the discrepancies that exist between modern beehives and beehives of the ancient world, the professor contends that nowadays some chemical analaysis method have already proved that the ancient fossils are indeed the product of bees. On country to the speculation empasized in the reading, the professor believes the difference between the morden and ancient beehives is just a part of natural evolution.
评估结果
1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯与衔接：4 语言使用：3
2.预估分数
25. 3.任务完成度
整体来说，你的文章回应了任务要求，对阅读和听力材料中的观点进行了比较。但是，有些句子表达不够准确，可能会影响读者理解。建议在写作时更加注意句子结构和词汇的准确性。
示例1： 原文："The reading and the lecture seperate over the idea whether the bees existed up to 200 million years ago." 修改后："The reading and the lecture present conflicting views on whether bees existed up to 200 million years ago."
示例2： 原文："On country to the speculation empasized in the reading, the professor believes the difference between the morden and ancient beehives is just a part of natural evolution." 修改后："Contrary to the speculation emphasized in the reading, the professor believes that the differences between modern and ancient beehives are simply a part of natural evolution."
4.文章结构与组织 文章的结构基本清晰，包括引言、主体和结论。每段都集中讨论一个具体观点，并提供支持细节。但是，在段落之间添加一些过渡词或短语可以使文章更连贯。
建议1： 在第一段和第二段之间添加过渡词：“首先”，以帮助引导读者从一个观点过渡到另一个观点。
建议2： 在第二段和第三段之间添加过渡词：“此外”，以帮助引导读者从一个观点过渡到另一个观点。
5. 语法批改
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Furthermore, while the professor acknowledges the flower pollen and nectar is a crucial food resource of the bees, he maintains that bees may have other food alternatives such as honey produced by trees including pines. So the bees can still gain the necessaynecessary(misspelling) nutrition without their access to flowering plants.
Additionally, as the discrepancies that exist between modern beehives and beehives of the ancient world, the professor contends that nowadays some chemical analaysisanalysis(misspelling) method have already proved that the ancient fossils are indeed the product of bees. On country to the speculation empasizedemphasized(misspelling) in the reading, the professor believes the difference between the mordenBorden(misspelling) and ancient beehives is just a part of natural evolution.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
The reading and the lecture diverge on the idea of whether bees existed up to 200 million years ago. The professor provides several counterarguments against the reading, casting doubt on its assertion that bees could not have existed for such a long time due to insufficient evidence.
Firstly, the professor argues that fossils of other animals from that period are formed by layers and layers of sediments, making it difficult to discover a bee trapped in tree resin. Thus, the statement in the reading that the missing fossil record of bees indicates they could not have existed at that time is challenged.
Furthermore, while the professor acknowledges that flower pollen and nectar are crucial food resources for bees, he maintains that bees may have other food alternatives such as honeydew produced by trees including pines. Consequently, bees could still obtain necessary nutrition without access to flowering plants.
Additionally, regarding the discrepancies between modern beehives and those of the ancient world, the professor contends that current chemical analysis methods have already proven that ancient fossils are indeed products of bees. Contrary to the speculation emphasized in the reading, he believes the difference between modern and ancient beehives is simply a part of natural evolution. (206 words)
Revised essay with explanations inline:
The reading and the lecture seperate over diverge (changed "separate" to "diverge" for better word choice) on the idea of whether the bees existed up to 200 million years ago. The professor provides several counterarguments against the reading, casting doubt on its point that the bees cannot exist up to assertion (changed "point" to "assertion" for clarity) that bees could not have existed for such a long time because of insuffient due to insufficient evidence.
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Additionally, as regarding the discrepancies that exist between modern beehives and beehives those of the ancient world, the professor contends that nowadays some current chemical analaysis method analysis methods have already proved that the proven that ancient fossils are indeed the product products of bees. On Contrary to (changed "On country to to" to "Contrary to") the speculation empasized emphasized in the reading, the professor he believes the difference between the morden modern and ancient beehives is just simply a part of natural evolution.
8. Mind Map
- Introduction
- Reading and lecture divergence
- Bees' existence 200 million years ago
- Fossil Record
- Reading: Missing fossil record indicates no bees
- Lecture: Fossils difficult to discover due to sediment layers
- Food Resources
- Reading: Flower pollen and nectar crucial for bees
- Lecture: Bees may have other food alternatives (e.g., honeydew)
- Beehives Discrepancies
- Reading: Modern and ancient beehives are different, questioning ancient bee existence
- Lecture: Chemical analysis proves ancient fossils are bee products; natural evolution explains differences
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| divergence | /daɪˈvɜːrʒəns/ | noun | A difference or conflict in opinions, interests, or ideas | 分歧 | The divergence between the reading and the lecture is significant. |
| sediment | /ˈsɛdɪmənt/ | noun | Solid material that settles at the bottom of a liquid | 沉积物 | The fossils were found in layers of sediment. |
| resin | /ˈrɛzɪn/ | noun | A sticky substance produced by some trees | 树脂 | The bee was trapped in tree resin millions of years ago. |
| honeydew | /ˈhʌnidu:/ | noun | A sweet, sticky substance secreted by certain insects | 蜜露 | Bees can also feed on honeydew produced by trees. |
| evolution | /ˌi:vəˈlu:ʃən/ | noun | The gradual development of something | 进化 | The difference between modern and ancient beehives is due to natural evolution. |
| counterargument | /ˈkaʊntərˌɑrɡjʊmənt/ | noun | An argument or set of reasons put forward to oppose an idea or theory developed in another argument | 反驳论点 | The professor provides several counterarguments against the reading. |
| discrepancy | /dɪˈskrɛpənsi/ | noun | A difference between two things that should be the same | 差异 | There is a discrepancy between the modern and ancient beehives. |
| speculation | /ˌspɛkjʊˈleɪʃən/ | noun | The forming of a theory without firm evidence | 推测 | The reading's speculation about ancient bees is not supported by evidence. |
| nutrition | /nju:ˈtrɪʃən/ | noun | The process of obtaining the food necessary for health and growth | 营养 | Bees could still obtain necessary nutrition without access to flowering plants. |
| assertion | /əˈsɜ:rʃən/ | noun | A confident and forceful statement of fact or belief | 断言 | The lecture casts doubt on the reading's assertion about bees' existence. |
6. Essay Revision
The reading and the lecture diverge on the idea of whether bees existed up to 200 million years ago. The professor provides several counterarguments against the reading, casting doubt on its assertion that bees could not have existed for such a long time due to insufficient evidence.
Firstly, the professor argues that fossils of other animals from that period are formed by layers and layers of sediments, making it difficult to discover a bee trapped in tree resin. Thus, the statement in the reading that the missing fossil record of bees indicates they could not have existed at that time is challenged.
Furthermore, while the professor acknowledges that flower pollen and nectar are crucial food resources for bees, he maintains that bees may have other food alternatives such as honeydew produced by trees including pines. Consequently, bees could still obtain necessary nutrition without access to flowering plants.
Additionally, regarding the discrepancies between modern beehives and those of the ancient world, the professor contends that current chemical analysis methods have already proven that ancient fossils are indeed products of bees. Contrary to the speculation emphasized in the reading, he believes the difference between modern and ancient beehives is simply a part of natural evolution.
