TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing andon how wel your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an efective response wilbe 150 to 225 words.
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旧版托福题型
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题目概览
阅读段落
The Erie Canal, built in the early nineteenth century, is an artificial waterway over 300 miles long. It connects the Hudson River north of New York City to the interior of the United States. The canal opened up water transport from much of the Midwest all the way to the East Coast of the United States. However, before its construction, many critics doubted that the proiect would be successful. There seemed to be too many challenges. The first challenge was the local terrain and landscape. The canal had to be dug out and built through areas that would make construction difficult. There were many forests, and clearing a channel through a forest required a slow process of using saws to cut down trees and then axes to chop out the tree stumps and roots that remained. In addition, another challenge was that the canal would also pass through wetlands, in which workers might fall ill from malaria, a disease caused by mosquitoes. The second challenge was a lack of workers. The entire United States at that time had a relatively small population. The massive construction of a canal would require many thousands of workers, which opponents of the canal said the country would not be able to supply. Finally, critics argued that the Erie Canal would not yield enough benefits to justify its high cost. The main purpose of the canal was to facilitate commerce between the coast and the interior of the United States. However, at the time there were simply not very many people who lived or wanted to settle in the Midwest, so there wasn't that much in the way of goods produced there to be sent back to the coast.
题目
You have 20 minutes to plan and write your response. Your response will be judged on the basis of the quality of your writing andon how wel your response presents the points in the lecture and their relationship to the reading passage. Typically, an efective response wilbe 150 to 225 words.
用户样本与评估结果
用户样本
The reading passage claims some challenges about the project of the construction of the canal. However, the lecturer challenges this claim by presenting several arguments that contradict the evidence cited in the reading passage. To begin with, the reading worried about the local terrain and landscape. The speaker, however, points out that this argument is not convincing. She eliminates this concern by citing two possible ways. firstly, about the trees that needed to be cleared away. Some useful devices were invested. In order to pull the tree down, a special device called a "stump puller" was invented. An animal pulls the tree out of the ground. Therefore, it can reduce the labor. Besides, the worker wait until winter to do the construction owing to the mosquitoes that cause malaria are not active at that time. Secondly, the passage indicates that a lack of workers is also a challenge for the construction. Nevertheless, the speaker disagrees with this idea by arguing that thousands of migrants arrived in this area around the time of the beginning of the construction. Many people want jobs, and construction can provide them with many different kinds of jobs. As a result, there are sufficient workers for the construction. Finally, the reading material suggests that the Eris Cnanl would not yield enough benefits to justify its high cost. Nonetheless, the professor casts doubt on this claim by pointing out that the reason why not very many people live here is because it is difficult to get there and costly to ship goods back. However, this was all changed by the canal. The travel time decreased from seven weeks to seven days and the cost of shipping is reduced to only 10 dollars by waterways.
评估结果
1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯性和衔接：4 语言使用：3
2.预估分数
25. 3.任务完成度
整体来说，你的文章回答了题目，并且成功地阐述了听力材料中的观点以及它们与阅读材料的关系。然而，为了更好地完成任务，建议你在论述每个观点时，进一步提供详细的解释和例证。此外，在引用听力材料中的信息时，请确保准确无误。
示例1： 原文：“An animal pulls the tree out of the ground.” 修改后：“A team of strong animals like oxen then pulled this device, which then pulled the stump out of the ground, greatly reducing the amount of manual labor involved.”
示例2： 原文：“The travel time decreased from seven weeks to seven days and the cost of shipping is reduced to only 10 dollars by waterways.” 修改后：“The travel time for new settlers to get to the Midwest decreased from six weeks to six days, and as for the cost of shipping products from the interior back to the East Coast, what had cost $100 to ship over land was reduced to only $10 by way of the waterways.”
4.文章结构与组织 你的文章结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。每段都集中讨论了一个具体的观点，并提供了支持细节。然而，在段落之间加入明确的过渡词或短语，有助于提高文章的连贯性和衔接。
示例1： 原文：“To begin with, the reading worried about the local terrain and landscape.” 修改后：“To begin with, the reading worried about the local terrain and landscape; however, the lecturer provides solutions to overcome this challenge.”
示例2： 原文：“Secondly, the passage indicates that a lack of workers is also a challenge for the construction.” 修改后：“In contrast to the passage's concern about a lack of workers, the lecturer explains how this challenge was resolved during the construction process.”
5. 语法批改
The reading passage claims some challenges about the project of the construction of the canal. However, the lecturer challenges this claim by presenting several arguments that contradict the evidence cited in the reading passage. To begin with, the reading worried about the local terrain and landscape. The speaker, however, points out that this argument is not convincing. She eliminates this concern by citing two possible ways. firstlyFirstly(Checks that a sentence starts with an uppercase letter), about the trees that needed to be cleared away. Some useful devices were invested. In order to pull the tree down, a special device called a "stump puller" was invented. An animal pulls the tree out of the ground. Therefore, it can reduce the labor. Besides, the worker wait until winter to do the construction owing to the mosquitoes that cause malaria are not active at that time. Secondly, the passage indicates that a lack of workers is also a challenge for the construction. Nevertheless, the speaker disagrees with this idea by arguing that thousands of migrants arrived in this area around the time of the beginning of the construction. Many people want jobs, and construction can provide them with many different kinds of jobs. As a result, there are sufficient workers for the construction. Finally, the reading material suggests that the Eris CnanlCan(misspelling) would not yield enough benefits to justify its high cost. Nonetheless, the professor casts doubt on this claim by pointing out that the reason why not very many people live here is because it is difficult to get there and costly to ship goods back. However, this was all changed by the canal. The travel time decreased from seven weeks to seven daysdays,(This rule identifies whether commas are missing in a sentence.) and the cost of shipping is reduced to only 10 dollars by waterways.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
The reading passage outlines several challenges concerning the construction of the Erie Canal. However, the lecturer refutes these claims by presenting counterarguments that contradict the evidence provided in the reading passage.
Firstly, the reading passage expresses concern about the local terrain and landscape, posing difficulties for canal construction. The speaker, on the other hand, dismisses this concern by citing two effective solutions. Regarding tree removal, she explains that innovative devices were invented to facilitate this process. For instance, a "stump puller" was developed to extract tree stumps and roots from the ground with minimal manual labor, as strong animals like oxen would pull them out. Furthermore, workers strategically waited until winter to construct through wetlands since malaria-carrying mosquitoes are inactive during that season.
Secondly, the reading passage asserts that a lack of workers posed a significant challenge for canal construction. Contrarily, the lecturer disputes this notion by explaining that coincidentally thousands of immigrants arrived in the United States around the time construction commenced. These newcomers sought employment opportunities and were willing to undertake labor-intensive tasks associated with canal building. Consequently, there was an adequate workforce available for construction.
Lastly, the reading material contends that the Erie Canal would not generate sufficient benefits to justify its high cost. The professor counters this argument by highlighting that limited settlement in the interior of the United States was primarily due to difficulties in accessing these regions and expensive shipping costs for goods transport. The completion of Erie Canal revolutionized this situation as travel time for settlers decreased from six weeks to six days and shipping costs dropped significantly from $100 to $10 via waterways. (274 words)
Section Title: 6.文章修订
The reading passage claims outlines several challenges concerning the construction of the Erie Canal (changed "claims some challenges about the project of the construction of the canal. canal" to "outlines several challenges concerning the construction of the Erie Canal" for clarity and conciseness). However, the lecturer challenges this claim refutes these claims by presenting several arguments counterarguments that contradict the evidence cited provided in the reading passage. To begin with, the reading worried passage (rephrased to improve sentence structure).
Firstly, the reading passage expresses concern about the local terrain and landscape. landscape, posing difficulties for canal construction (rephrased for clarity). The speaker, however, points out that this argument is not convincing. She eliminates on the other hand, dismisses this concern by citing two possible ways. firstly, about the trees that needed to be cleared away. Some useful effective solutions (improved sentence structure). Regarding tree removal, she explains that innovative devices were invested. In order to pull the tree down, a special device called invented to facilitate this process (clarified meaning). For instance, a "stump puller" was invented. An animal pulls the developed to extract tree stumps and roots from the ground with minimal manual labor, as strong animals like oxen would pull them out of the ground. Therefore, it can reduce the labor. Besides, the worker wait (revised for clarity and conciseness). Furthermore, workers strategically waited until winter to do the construction owing to the construct through wetlands since malaria-carrying mosquitoes that cause malaria are not active at that time. inactive during that season (improved sentence structure).
Secondly, the reading passage indicates asserts that a lack of workers is also posed a significant challenge for the construction. Nevertheless, the speaker disagrees with this idea canal construction (rephrased for clarity). Contrarily, the lecturer disputes this notion by arguing that explaining that coincidentally thousands of migrants immigrants arrived in this area the United States around the time of the beginning of the construction. Many people want jobs, and construction can provide them construction commenced (improved sentence structure). These newcomers sought employment opportunities and were willing to undertake labor-intensive tasks associated with many different kinds of jobs. As a result, canal building (clarified meaning). Consequently, there are sufficient workers for the construction. Finally, was an adequate workforce available for construction (revised for conciseness).
Lastly, the reading material suggests that the Eris Cnanl contends that the Erie Canal would not yield enough generate sufficient benefits to justify its high cost. Nonetheless, the cost (rephrased for clarity). The professor casts doubt on this claim counters this argument by pointing out that the reason why not very many people live here is because it is difficult to get there and costly to ship highlighting that limited settlement in the interior of the United States was primarily due to difficulties in accessing these regions and expensive shipping costs for goods back. However, this was all changed by the canal. transport (improved sentence structure). The completion of Erie Canal revolutionized this situation as travel time for settlers decreased from seven six weeks to seven six days and the cost of shipping is reduced to only 10 dollars by waterways.costs dropped significantly from $100 to $10 via waterways (revised for clarity and conciseness).
8. Mind Map
1. Introduction
- Reading passage: challenges of Erie Canal construction
- Lecturer: counterarguments
2. Terrain and Landscape
- Reading: difficult local terrain
- Lecture: innovative solutions
a. Stump puller for tree removal
b. Winter construction to avoid mosquitoes
3. Lack of Workers
- Reading: insufficient workforce for construction
- Lecture: immigrants provided adequate labor force
4. Cost vs Benefits
- Reading: high cost, insufficient benefits
- Lecture: significant benefits after completion
a. Decreased travel time for settlers
b. Reduced shipping costs
5. Conclusion
- Lecturer effectively refutes reading passage claims.
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation (if needed) | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| Terrain | /təˈreɪn/ | Noun | A stretch of land, especially with regard to its physical features | 地形 | The terrain posed challenges for the canal construction, but innovative solutions were found. |
| Stump puller | /stʌmp ˈpʊlər/ | Noun | A device used to remove tree stumps and roots from the ground with minimal manual labor | 树桩拔除器 | The stump puller allowed workers to remove tree stumps more efficiently during canal construction. |
| Wetlands | /ˈwetləndz/ | Noun | An area of land where water covers the soil or is present either at or near the surface of the soil all year or for varying periods of time during the year, including during the growing season. | 湿地 | Workers waited until winter to construct through wetlands, avoiding malaria-carrying mosquitoes. |
| Immigrants | /ˈɪmɪɡrənts/ | Noun | People who have come to a different country in order to live there permanently | 移民 | Thousands of immigrants arrived in the United States and provided an adequate workforce for canal construction. |
| Labor-intensive | /ˈleɪbər ɪnˈtensɪv/ | Adjective | (of work) needing a large workforce or a large amount of work in relation to output | 劳动密集型的 | Canal building was labor-intensive, but the influx of immigrants helped meet the demand for workers. |
| Settlement | /ˈsetlmənt/ | Noun | A place, typically one that has hitherto been uninhabited, where people establish a community. | 定居点，殖民地 | The Erie Canal facilitated settlement in the interior of the United States by reducing travel time and shipping costs. |
| Revolutionize | /ˌrevəˈluːʃənaɪz/ | Verb | Change (something) radically or fundamentally. | 彻底改变，使革命化 | The completion of Erie Canal revolutionized transportation and trade in the United States. |
| Shipping costs | /ˈʃɪpɪŋ kɒsts/ | Noun | The expenses associated with transporting goods from one place to another. | 运费，运输成本 | Shipping costs dropped significantly from $100 to $10 via waterways after the canal's completion. |
| Waterways | /ˈwɔ:təweiz/ | Noun | _A river, canal, or other route for travel by water. | 水道，航道 | The Erie Canal was a significant waterway that greatly reduced shipping costs and travel time. |
| Counterargument | /ˈkaʊntərˌɑ:rɡjʊmənt/ | Noun | _An argument or set of reasons put forward to oppose an idea or theory developed in another argument. | 反驳论点，反论 | The lecturer presented counterarguments that effectively refuted the claims made in the reading passage. |
