TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: This week, we’ll be discussing ways to address air pollution. One idea is introducing environmental taxes on air travel. Such taxes also referred to as ecological taxes or green taxes, are extra charges that get added to the price of airplane tickets. Money collected from these taxes could be invested in environmentally friendly technologies or in promoting other cleaner modes of transportation. Do you think there should be an environmental tax on air travel? Why or why not?
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This week, we’ll be discussing ways to address air pollution. One idea is introducing environmental taxes on air travel. Such taxes also referred to as ecological taxes or green taxes, are extra charges that get added to the price of airplane tickets. Money collected from these taxes could be invested in environmentally friendly technologies or in promoting other cleaner modes of transportation. Do you think there should be an environmental tax on air travel? Why or why not?
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I’m inclined to Claire’s point of view that environmental taxes should not be adopted, though it has a certain degree of advantage as Andrew’s opinion states. I think environmental taxes would not reduce the air pollution but become a problem to certain groups of people. Since the airplane tickets are expensive enough currently, there are rich people who usually take airplanes. However, these kind of people would not mind to pay environmental taxes because of their huge wealthy, so they will keep taking airplanes, emitting plenty of particular matters and nitrogen dioxide which apparently pollute the air significantly. For the poor, environmental taxes raise the bar for taking airplanes, meaning that they need to save more money for a ticket and the gap between the rich people’s and the poor people’s lives are increasing. Therefore, I think environmental taxes should not be there on air travel.
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1.子项得分 任务完成度：2 组织：3 连贯与衔接：3 语言使用：3
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17. 3.任务完成度
你的文章没有充分回答问题，因为它没有包括阅读和听力部分的内容。在托福综合写作任务1中，你需要结合阅读和听力材料来回答问题。建议你在文章中引用阅读和听力材料的具体信息，以支持你的观点。
示例1： 在阅读部分中，作者提到环境税可以用于投资环保技术或推广其他更清洁的交通方式。然而，在听力部分中，讲座提到这种税收可能对低收入人群产生不利影响。
示例2： 根据阅读材料，绿色税收可能会鼓励人们选择更环保的出行方式。但是，在听力部分中，讲座指出这种税收可能导致航空公司减少航班次数，从而影响消费者的选择。
4.文章结构与组织 你的文章结构不够明确。建议你使用一个简短的引言来介绍主题，并在正文段落中详细讨论论点。最后，请确保使用一个结论段来总结观点并重新陈述论点。此外，你需要在段落之间使用更清晰的过渡词或短语来增强连贯性。
示例1： 引言：本文将讨论是否应该对航空旅行征收环境税，结合阅读和听力材料的观点进行分析。
示例2： 过渡词/短语：尽管阅读材料提到了环境税的一些潜在好处，但听力部分提供了一些反驳这些观点的论据。例如，在阅读材料中提到的投资环保技术这一好处，在听力部分中则指出这种税收可能导致航空公司减少航班次数。
5. 语法批改
I’m inclined to Claire’s point of view that environmental taxes should not be adopted, though it has a certain degree of advantage as Andrew’s opinion states. I think environmental taxes would not reduce the air pollution but become a problem to certain groups of people. Since the airplane tickets are expensive enough currently, there are rich people who usually take airplanes. However, these kindthis kind('this' vs. 'these') of people would not mind to pay environmental taxes because of their huge wealthy, so they will keep taking airplanes, emitting plenty of particular matters and nitrogen dioxide which apparently pollute the air significantly. For the poor, environmental taxes raise the bar for taking airplanes, meaning that they need to save more money for a ticket and the gap between the rich people’s and the poor people’s lives are increasing. Therefore, I think environmental taxes should not be there on air travel.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
Revised Essay:
I concur with Claire's perspective that environmental taxes on air travel should not be implemented, despite the potential benefits as mentioned by Andrew. In my opinion, such taxes would not effectively reduce air pollution and could instead pose challenges for specific segments of the population.
Currently, airplane tickets are already quite costly, primarily catering to affluent individuals who frequently travel by air. Imposing environmental taxes would likely have minimal impact on this group due to their substantial financial resources; they would continue to fly regularly, contributing to significant emissions of particulate matter and nitrogen dioxide, which are major pollutants in the atmosphere.
On the other hand, for economically disadvantaged individuals, these taxes would make air travel even more prohibitive. Consequently, they would need to save additional funds to afford a ticket, exacerbating the existing disparities between the lives of the wealthy and those struggling financially.
In light of these considerations, I believe that implementing environmental taxes on air travel is not an effective solution for addressing air pollution concerns and could potentially create further social inequalities. Instead, alternative strategies should be explored to promote cleaner modes of transportation and invest in environmentally friendly technologies without disproportionately burdening specific segments of society. (206 words)
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On the other hand, for economically disadvantaged individuals (Changed "the poor" to "economically disadvantaged individuals" for a more respectful term), these kind of people would not mind to pay environmental taxes because of their huge wealthy, so taxes would make air travel even more prohibitive. Consequently, they will keep taking airplanes, emitting plenty of particular matters and nitrogen dioxide which apparently pollute the air significantly. For the poor, environmental taxes raise the bar for taking airplanes, meaning that they would need to save more money for a ticket and the additional funds to afford a ticket, exacerbating the existing disparities between the lives of the wealthy and those struggling financially (Changed "the gap between the rich people’s people's and the poor people’s people's lives are increasing. Therefore, increasing" to better convey the idea).
In light of these considerations, I think believe that implementing environmental taxes on air travel is not an effective solution for addressing air pollution concerns and could potentially create further social inequalities (Rephrased sentence for better clarity). Instead, alternative strategies should not be there on air travel.explored to promote cleaner modes of transportation and invest in environmentally friendly technologies without disproportionately burdening specific segments of society.
8. Mind Map
1. Introduction
- Claire's perspective
- Environmental taxes on air travel
2. Ineffectiveness of taxes
- Costly airplane tickets
- Affluent individuals unaffected
3. Challenges for disadvantaged individuals
- Prohibitive costs
- Exacerbating disparities
4. Alternative strategies
- Cleaner modes of transportation
- Environmentally friendly technologies
5. Conclusion
- Ineffectiveness and potential inequalities
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| concur | /kənˈkɜr/ | verb | to agree or have the same opinion | 同意 | I concur with your assessment of the situation. |
| affluent | /ˈæfluənt/ | adjective | having a lot of money and a good standard of living | 富裕的 | The affluent neighborhood had many luxurious homes. |
| emissions | /ɪˈmɪʃənz/ | noun | the act of sending gas, heat, light, etc., out into the air | 排放物 | Airplane emissions contribute to air pollution. |
| particulate matter | /pɑrˈtɪkjələt ˈmætər/ | /noun | /tiny particles suspended in the air that can be harmful to health | /颗粒物 | Particulate matter is a major contributor to air pollution. |
| nitrogen dioxide | /naɪˈtrɒdʒən daɪˈɒksaɪd/ | /noun | /a toxic gas that is a byproduct of burning fossil fuels | /二氧化氮 | Nitrogen dioxide emissions are harmful to the environment. |
| prohibitive | /prəˈhɪbɪtɪv/ | /adjective | /so high that it prevents people from buying or doing something | /禁止性的 | The prohibitive cost of air travel made it difficult for some people to afford. |
| disparities | /dɪˈspærətiz/ | /noun | /differences, especially ones that are unfair | /差距 | The tax would exacerbate existing disparities between the rich and poor. |
| environmentally friendly | /ɪnˌvaɪrənˈmɛntli ˈfrɛndli/ | adjective | not harmful to the environment | 环保的 | The company is investing in environmentally friendly technologies. |
| disproportionately | /dɪsproʊˈpɔrʃənətli/ | adverb | to an extent that is too large or too small in comparison with something else | 不成比例地 | The tax would disproportionately burden specific segments of society. |
Section Title: 6.文章修订
Revised Essay:
I concur with Claire's perspective that environmental taxes on air travel should not be implemented, despite the potential benefits as mentioned by Andrew. In my opinion, such taxes would not effectively reduce air pollution and could instead pose challenges for specific segments of the population.
Currently, airplane tickets are already quite costly, primarily catering to affluent individuals who frequently travel by air. Imposing environmental taxes would likely have minimal impact on this group due to their substantial financial resources; they would continue to fly regularly, contributing to significant emissions of particulate matter and nitrogen dioxide, which are major pollutants in the atmosphere.
On the other hand, for economically disadvantaged individuals, these taxes would make air travel even more prohibitive. Consequently, they would need to save additional funds to afford a ticket, exacerbating the existing disparities between the lives of the wealthy and those struggling financially.
In light of these considerations, I believe that implementing environmental taxes on air travel is not an effective solution for addressing air pollution concerns and could potentially create further social inequalities. Instead, alternative strategies should be explored to promote cleaner modes of transportation and invest in environmentally friendly technologies without disproportionately burdening specific segments of society.
