TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summerize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage
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题目概览
阅读段落
Reading——Erie Canal The Erie Canal, built in the early nineteenth century, is an artificial waterway over 300 miles long. It connects the Hudson River north of New York City to the interior of the United States. The canal opened up water transport from much of the Midwest all the way to the East Coast of the United States. However, before its construction, many critics doubted that the project would be successful. There seemed to be too many challenges. The first challenge was the local terrain and landscape. The canal had to be dug out and built through areas that would make construction difficult. There were many forests, and clearing a channel through a forest required a slow process of using saws to cut down trees and then axes to chop out the tree stumps and roots that remained. In addition, another challenge was that the canal would also pass through wetlands, in which workers might fall ill from malaria, a disease caused by mosquitoes. The second challenge was a lack of workers. The entire United States at that time had a relatively small population. The massive construction of a canal would require many thousands of workers, which opponents of the canal said the country would not be able to supply. Finally, critics argued that the Erie Canal would not yield enough benefits to justify its high cost. The main purpose of the canal was to facilitate commerce between the coast and the interior of the United States. However, at the time there were simply not very many people who lived or wanted to settle in the Midwest, so there wasn't that much in the way of goods produced there to be sent back to the coast.
题目
Summerize the points made in the lecture, being sure to explain how they challenge the specific points made in the reading passage
用户样本与评估结果
用户样本
In the early nineteenth century, the plan to construct The Erie Canal was criticized for multiple reasons, according to the passage. In the lecture, the professor explained why the critics were wrong and the project turned out to be a phenomenal triumph. First and foremost, challenged by the obstacle of complicated terrain along the canal’s route, for example, the forest that is difficult to remove and wetlands where a disease caused by mosquitoes prevails, it may be costly to complete the construction. However, the professor proposed that a kind of special machine was put into use to chop out tree stumps that blocked the construction route, which conspicuously alleviated the workload of clearing up forests. What’s more, the construction through the wetland can be initiated in winter, when the mosquitoes are inactive and unable to spread diseases to workers. Additionally, contemporary critics argue against the plan by the fact the shortage of workforce originated from the low population in America at that time. On the contrary, it is that era when considerable European immigrants who desire jobs crowded into America. They are so strenuous and arduous that they are willing and pleased to do such hard work as digging a canal. It follows that the workforce, to some extent, is not a problem. Moreover, the Midwest, which the canal planned to connect, was desolate and uninhabited, thus not capable of outputting enough economic return in consideration of the high expense of digging a canal. To refute this perspective, the professor suggests that the lack of population in the Midwest originated from the high time and monetary expense of transportation. The situation would differ after the construction of the canal. To be specific, the 6 weeks travel could be dramatically reduced to 6 days, while the monetary cost could be decreased from 100 to 10 dollars, which would by all means incentive the development of the Midwest.
评估结果
1.子项得分 任务完成度：4 组织：4 连贯性和衔接：4 语言使用：3
2.预估分数
25. 3.任务完成度
整体来说，你的文章回答了题目要求，总结了听力中提到的观点，并对阅读材料中的论点进行了反驳。但是，有一些地方可以改进。首先，在引用听力内容时，尽量避免使用过于直接的引述方式，而是用自己的话来表达。其次，在反驳阅读材料时，可以更明确地指出听力与阅读材料之间的不同之处。
示例1： 原文：“However, the professor proposed that a kind of special machine was put into use to chop out tree stumps that blocked the construction route, which conspicuously alleviated the workload of clearing up forests.” 改进：“The professor mentioned that innovative devices were developed to remove tree stumps and roots more efficiently, significantly reducing the labor required for clearing forests.”
示例2： 原文：“To refute this perspective, the professor suggests that the lack of population in the Midwest originated from the high time and monetary expense of transportation.” 改进：“The professor counters this argument by explaining that the low population in the Midwest was due to the high cost and time-consuming nature of transportation before the canal's construction.”
4.文章结构与组织 你的文章结构清晰，包括引言、正文和结论。每个段落都集中讨论一个具体观点并提供支持细节。然而，可以在段落之间加入更明确的过渡词或短语，以增强文章的连贯性。
建议1：在引言部分，可以使用一些过渡词汇，如“首先”、“其次”和“最后”，来预告文章将讨论的三个主要观点。
示例1： 原文：“In the lecture, the professor explained why the critics were wrong and the project turned out to be a phenomenal triumph.” 改进：“In the lecture, the professor explained why the critics were wrong by addressing three main challenges: clearing forests and wetlands, obtaining enough workers, and generating sufficient economic benefits.”
建议2：在正文段落之间使用过渡词或短语，如“此外”、“然而”等。
示例2： 原文：“It follows that the workforce, to some extent, is not a problem.” 改进：“It follows that the workforce, to some extent, is not a problem. Moreover, another concern raised by critics was...”
5. 语法批改
In the early nineteenth century, the plan to construct The Erie Canal was criticized for multiple reasons, according to the passage. In the lecture, the professor explained why the critics were wrong and, and(comma between independent clauses) the project turned out to be a phenomenal triumph.
First and foremost, challenged by the obstacle of complicated terrain along the canal’s route, for example, the forest that is difficult to remove and wetlands where a disease caused by mosquitoes prevails, it may be costly to complete the construction. However, the professor proposed that a kind of special machine was put into use to chop out tree stumps that blocked the construction route, which conspicuously alleviated the workload of clearing up forests. What’s more, the construction through the wetland can be initiated in winter, when the mosquitoes are inactive and unable to spread diseases to workers.
Additionally, contemporary critics argue against the plan by the fact the shortage of workforce originated from the low population in America at that time. On the contrary, it is that era when considerable European immigrants who desire jobs crowded into America. They are so strenuous and arduous that they are willing and pleased to do such hard work as digging a canal. It follows that the workforce, to some extent, is not a problem.
Moreover, the Midwest, which the canal planned to connect, was desolate and uninhabited, thus not capable of outputting enough economic return in consideration of the high expense of digging a canal. To refute this perspective, the professor suggests that the lack of population in the Midwest originated from the high time and monetary expense of transportation. The situation would differ after the construction of the canal. To be specific, the 6 weeks travel could be dramatically reduced to 6 days, while the monetary cost could be decreased from 100 to 10 dollars, which would by all means incentive the development of the Midwest.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
In the early nineteenth century, the plan to construct The Erie Canal faced significant criticism for various reasons, as outlined in the passage. However, the lecture counters these arguments by explaining how the project overcame these challenges and ultimately became a resounding success.
Firstly, critics were concerned about the difficult terrain along the canal's route, such as dense forests and disease-ridden wetlands. The professor explains that innovative machinery was developed to remove tree stumps efficiently, significantly reducing the labor required for clearing forests. Furthermore, construction through wetlands was strategically carried out during winter when mosquitoes were inactive, thus preventing the spread of diseases among workers.
Secondly, critics argued that there would be a shortage of workers due to America's low population at that time. Contrary to this belief, a large influx of European immigrants seeking employment arrived in America during this period. These hardworking individuals were more than willing to take on the arduous task of digging the canal, ensuring an adequate workforce for its construction.
Lastly, critics claimed that connecting to the sparsely populated Midwest would not yield sufficient economic returns to justify the high cost of building the canal. The professor refutes this argument by highlighting that transportation difficulties were a primary reason for low population levels in this region. With the completion of The Erie Canal, travel time from New York City to Midwest dramatically reduced from six weeks to six days while shipping costs decreased from $100 to just $10. This transformation incentivized development in Midwest and facilitated commerce between coastal and interior regions of United States. (264 words)
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8. Mind Map
1. Introduction
- Essay structure
- Lecture points
2. Difficult Terrain
- Critics' concerns
- Innovative machinery
- Winter construction
3. Worker Shortage
- Critics' argument
- European immigrants
- Adequate workforce
4. Economic Returns
- Critics' claim
- Transportation difficulties
- Erie Canal benefits
5. Conclusion
- Counterarguments to criticism
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| criticism | /ˈkrɪtɪsɪzəm/ | noun | the expression of disapproval of someone or something | 批评 | The plan faced significant criticism from various sources. |
| terrain | /təˈreɪn/ | noun | a stretch of land, especially with regard to its physical features | 地形 | The difficult terrain along the canal's route posed challenges for construction. |
| innovative | /ˈinəˌvādiv/ | adjective | featuring new methods; advanced and original | 创新的 | Innovative machinery was developed to remove tree stumps efficiently. |
| influx | /ˈinˌfləks/ | noun | _the arrival or entry of many people or things at the same time | _涌入 | A large influx of European immigrants arrived in America during this period. |
| arduous | /ˈärjo͞oəs/ | _adjective | _involving or requiring strenuous effort; difficult and tiring | _艰巨的 | These hardworking individuals were willing to take on the arduous task of digging the canal. |
| sparsely | /ˈspärsle/ | _adverb | _in a thinly dispersed manner; in small numbers or amounts | _稀疏地 | The Midwest was sparsely populated at that time. |
| economic returns | /iˌkänəmik rəˈtərnz/ | _noun phrase | _the financial gain or benefits resulting from an investment or project | _经济回报 | Critics claimed that connecting to the Midwest would not yield sufficient economic returns. |
| incentivize | /inˈsentivīz/ | verb | provide (someone) with an incentive for doing something | 激励 | The Erie Canal incentivized development in the Midwest. |
| commerce | /ˈkämərs/ | noun | the activity of buying and selling, especially on a large scale | 商业 | The Erie Canal facilitated commerce between coastal and interior regions of the United States. |
| transformation | /ˌtrænsfərˈmeɪʃn/ | noun | a thorough or dramatic change in form or appearance | 变革 | The completion of The Erie Canal brought about a significant transformation in transportation. |
Section Title: 6. Article Revision
In the early nineteenth century, the plan to construct The Erie Canal faced significant criticism for various reasons, as outlined in the passage. However, the lecture counters these arguments by explaining how the project overcame these challenges and ultimately became a resounding success.
Firstly, critics were concerned about the difficult terrain along the canal's route, such as dense forests and disease-ridden wetlands. The professor explains that innovative machinery was developed to remove tree stumps efficiently, significantly reducing the labor required for clearing forests. Furthermore, construction through wetlands was strategically carried out during winter when mosquitoes were inactive, thus preventing the spread of diseases among workers.
Secondly, critics argued that there would be a shortage of workers due to America's low population at that time. Contrary to this belief, a large influx of European immigrants seeking employment arrived in America during this period. These hardworking individuals were more than willing to take on the arduous task of digging the canal, ensuring an adequate workforce for its construction.
Lastly, critics claimed that connecting to the sparsely populated Midwest would not yield sufficient economic returns to justify the high cost of building the canal. The professor refutes this argument by highlighting that transportation difficulties were a primary reason for low population levels in this region. With the completion of The Erie Canal, travel time from New York City to Midwest dramatically reduced from six weeks to six days while shipping costs decreased from $100 to just $10. This transformation incentivized development in Midwest and facilitated commerce between coastal and interior regions of United States.
