TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: summarize the points made in the reading, be sure to explain how they respond to specific points made in the reading
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题目概览
阅读段落
Recent research has shed light on the health of aquatic ecosystems and the results are not good. to combat the declining health of marine ecosystems many scientists and politicians are advocating marine conservation techniques to ensure the preservation and restoration of ecosystems in oceans, seas, rivers and bays. marine conservation focuses on limiting human-caused damage to marine ecosystems as well as focusing on preserving vulnerable marine species. In the case of chesapeake bay, several techniques have been recommended to support sustainable populations of diverse and valuable animal species. unsustainable fishing practices have reduced crab populations to dangerous levels, so much so that the chesapeake bay crabs are now endangered. halting crab fishing and harvesting will ensure that the crab population can return to healthy size. stopping exploitive fishing is the surest way to restore health to an aquatic ecosystem. A second aquatic ecosystem restoration technique is to introduce oysters into the bay environment. oysters are able to filter and mitigate pollutants and act as natural aquatic filters. like fish, oysters pass water over their gills exchanging gas. however, oysters also filter out particles in the water. in essence the oyster is absorbing all the pallution in its surrounding area and pumps out fresh, clean water. Another manmade threat to aquatic ecosystems comes from water pollution from farms that use fertilizers. fertilizer is not a problem if used carefully. however, if too much fertilizer is used or applied at the wrong time, it can easily wash off and flow into lakes and streams. fertilizers contain nutrients such as nitrates and phosphates that can over-stimulate the growth of aquatic plants and algae, creating an imbalance in the delicate ecosystem. educating farmers of the consequences of fertilizer usage as well as instructing them on proper usage and application should be forefront in conservation techniques.
题目
summarize the points made in the reading, be sure to explain how they respond to specific points made in the reading
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用户样本
The reading primarily outlines three techniques used to support sustainable populations of various and valuable animal species in chesapeake bay. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting specific problems of each technique. Firstly, the reading claims that stop harvesting crabs might be an effective way. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating taht restrict harvesting crabs will be detrimental to local industry and economics. Industries that rely on crabs will be affected. Moreover, since livelihood of fishermen is ruined, they won't approve and follow the practice. Secondly, the reading asserts that introducing oysters into the bay environment can make sense, because they serve the function of filtering and mitigating pollutants. In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that introducing non-native species brings about the possibility of introducing new disease. If the disease is transmitted to native species, it will casue further damage to aquatic ecosystems. Finally, the reading posits that educate farmers how to use fertilizers properly might be a viable solution. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that the area around the bay is huge, so it's unrealistic to educate surrounding farmers and control the use of fertilizers. This approach might work well in a small scale, rather than in a huge area. Hence, other techniques should be developed and implemented. In summary, each point made in the reading to improve aquatic ecosystems in chesapeake bay is effectively countered by the listening.
评估结果
1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 4 Coherence and Cohesion: 4 Language Use: 3
2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 25
3.任务完成度 虽然你的文章在总体上回答了问题，但在某些方面仍有改进的空间。首先，在引用听力部分时，尝试更详细地解释说话者提出的反驳论点。其次，在文章结尾部分，可以加强总结，使读者更容易理解文章的主要观点。
示例1（原文）：Industries that rely on crabs will be affected. 示例1（修改后）：Industries that rely on crabs, such as restaurants and seafood markets, will be severely affected by the decline in crab harvesting.
示例2（原文）：This approach might work well in a small scale, rather than in a huge area. 示例2（修改后）：This approach might work well in a small scale, but considering the vast area of farmland surrounding Chesapeake Bay, it becomes unrealistic to expect all farmers to adhere to proper fertilizer usage.
4.文章结构与组织 Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and conclusion. However, there is room for improvement in terms of organization and transitions between ideas. Try to use more cohesive devices and transitional phrases to make your essay flow more smoothly.
Example 1 (Original): In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion... Example 1 (Improved): On the other hand, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion...
Example 2 (Original): Hence, other techniques should be developed and implemented. Example 2 (Improved): As a result, it is crucial to develop and implement alternative techniques to address the issue.
5. 语法批改
The reading primarily outlines three techniques used to support sustainable populations of various and valuable animal species in chesapeake bayChesapeake Bay(Checks upper/lower case spelling of some proper nouns). However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting specific problems of each technique.
Firstly, the reading claims that stop harvesting crabs might be an effective way. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating tahtthat(misspelling) restrict harvesting crabs will be detrimental to local industry and economics. Industries that rely on crabs will be affected. Moreover, since livelihood of fishermen is ruined, they won't approve and follow the practice.
Secondly, the reading asserts that introducing oysters into the bay environment can make sense, because they serve the function of filtering and mitigating pollutants. In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that introducing non-native species brings about the possibility of introducing new disease. If the disease is transmitted to native species, it will casuecase(misspelling) further damage to aquatic ecosystems.
Finally, the reading posits that educate farmers how to use fertilizers properly might be a viable solution. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that the area around the bay is huge, so it's unrealistic to educate surrounding farmers and control the use of fertilizers. This approach might work well in a small scale, rather than in a huge area. Hence, other techniques should be developed and implemented.
In summary, each point made in the reading to improve aquatic ecosystems in chesapeake bayChesapeake Bay(Checks upper/lower case spelling of some proper nouns) is effectively countered by the listening.
Section Title: 6.文章修订
The reading primarily outlines three techniques used to support sustainable populations of various and valuable animal species in Chesapeake Bay. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting specific problems of each technique.
Firstly, the reading claims that stopping crab harvesting might be an effective way. Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating that restricting crab harvesting will be detrimental to local industry and economics. Industries that rely on crabs will be affected. Moreover, since the livelihood of fishermen is ruined, they won't approve and follow the practice.
Secondly, the reading asserts that introducing oysters into the bay environment can make sense because they serve the function of filtering and mitigating pollutants. In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that introducing non-native species brings about the possibility of introducing new diseases. If these diseases are transmitted to native species, it will cause further damage to aquatic ecosystems.
Finally, the reading posits that educating farmers on how to use fertilizers properly might be a viable solution. Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that the area around the bay is huge, so it's unrealistic to educate surrounding farmers and control fertilizer use. This approach might work well on a small scale rather than in a vast area. Hence, other techniques should be developed and implemented.
In summary, each point made in the reading to improve aquatic ecosystems in Chesapeake Bay is effectively countered by the listening. (247 words)
Revised essay: Section Title: 7.文章批改
The reading primarily outlines three techniques used to support sustainable populations of various and valuable animal species in chesapeake bay. Chesapeake Bay. However, the listening challenges what is stated in the reading passage by presenting specific problems of each technique.
Firstly, the reading claims that stop stopping crab harvesting crabs might be an effective way. way (Changed "stop" to "stopping" for grammatical correctness). Conversely, the speaker refutes this point by stating taht that restricting crab harvesting (Corrected "taht restrict harvesting crabs crabs" to "restricting crab harvesting") will be detrimental to local industry and economics. Industries that rely on crabs will be affected. Moreover, since the livelihood of fishermen is ruined, ruined (Changed "livelihood of fishermen" to "the livelihood of fishermen" for clarity), they won't approve and follow the practice.
Secondly, the reading asserts that introducing oysters into the bay environment can make sense, sense because they serve the function of filtering and mitigating pollutants. In contrast, the speaker maintains an opposite opinion, arguing that introducing non-native species brings about the possibility of introducing new disease. diseases (Changed "disease" to "diseases" for plural consistency). If the disease is these diseases are transmitted to native species, it will casue cause (Corrected "casue" to "cause") further damage to aquatic ecosystems.
Finally, the reading posits that educate educating farmers on how to use fertilizers properly might be a viable solution. solution (Changed "educate farmers how to use fertilizers properly" to "educating farmers on how to use fertilizers properly"). Nevertheless, the speaker opposes this idea by mentioning that the area around the bay is huge, so it's unrealistic to educate surrounding farmers and control the use of fertilizers. fertilizer use (Changed "the use of fertilizers" to "fertilizer use"). This approach might work well in on a small scale, scale rather than in a huge area. vast area (Changed "huge" to "vast" for word variety). Hence, other techniques should be developed and implemented.
In summary, each point made in the reading to improve aquatic ecosystems in chesapeake bay Chesapeake Bay is effectively countered by the listening.
8. Mind Map
1. Introduction
- Chesapeake Bay
- Sustainable populations of animal species
2. Stopping Crab Harvesting
a. Reading: Effective way
b. Listening: Detrimental to local industry and economics
3. Introducing Oysters
a. Reading: Filtering and mitigating pollutants
b. Listening: Risk of introducing new diseases
4. Educating Farmers on Fertilizer Use
a. Reading: Viable solution
b. Listening: Unrealistic due to vast area around the bay
5. Conclusion
- Counterarguments from listening passage
9. Keywords
| Word | Phonetic Symbol | Part of Speech | English Definition | Simplified Chinese Translation | Sample Sentence |
|---|---|---|---|---|---|
| sustainable | /səˈsteɪnəbl/ | adjective | able to be maintained at a certain rate or level | 可持续的 | Sustainable development is crucial for the environment and future generations. |
| detrimental | /dɛtrɪˈmɛntl/ | adjective | causing harm or damage | 有害的，造成损害的 | Smoking is detrimental to your health. |
| mitigate | /ˈmɪtɪgeɪt/ | verb | make less severe, serious, or painful; lessen the gravity of (an offense or mistake) ｜减轻，缓和｜ We should take measures to mitigate the environmental impact of our actions. | ||
| introduce | /ˌɪntrəˈdjuːs/ | verb | introduce something new, especially a product｜引进，推出｜The company plans to introduce several new products this year. | ||
| non-native | /nɒnˈneɪtɪv/ | adjective | not indigenous, not native to a place｜外来的，非本地的｜Non-native species can sometimes cause problems in their new environments. | ||
| aquatic | /əˈkwætɪk/ | adjective | relating to water; living or growing in water｜水生的，水栖的｜Aquatic plants provide food and shelter for many animals. | ||
| ecosystem | /ˈiːkəʊsɪstəm/ | noun | a biological community of interacting organisms and their physical environment｜生态系统｜Human activities can have a negative impact on ecosystems. | ||
| fertilizer | /ˈfɜːrtəlaɪzər/ | noun | a chemical or natural substance added to soil or land to increase its fertility | 肥料 | Farmers use fertilizer to improve crop yields. |
| unrealistic | /ʌnrɪəˈlɪstɪk/ | adjective | not compatible with reality or fact; not representing things as they are | 不切实际的，不现实的 | Expecting everyone to agree is unrealistic. |
| counterargument | /ˈkaʊntərˌɑrgjumənt/ | noun | an argument or set of reasons put forward to oppose an idea or theory developed in another argument | 反驳论点，反论证 | The speaker presented several counterarguments against the proposed plan. |
