TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture,being sure to explain how they respond to the specific points made in the reading passage.

1.子项得分 Task fulfillment: 4 Organization: 3 Coherence and Cohesion: 3 Language Use: 3

2.预估分数 Estimated Score: 22

3.任务完成度 虽然你的文章回应了阅读和听力材料中的观点，但在表达时，有些地方可以更加明确。为了提高任务完成度，你可以更详细地解释听力材料中的论点，并清楚地说明它们是如何反驳阅读材料中的观点的。

Example 1: Instead of "In fact, among 40 million years, it is possible for species to cross the ocean.", you could write "The lecturer argues that even though such crossings are rare, four successful crossings could have occurred over the course of 40 million years."

Example 2: Instead of "Therefore, there definitely had sea current long time ago.", you could write "The lecturer explains that at that time, the sea currents flowed differently and were actually directed towards Madagascar, making it possible for the animals to reach the island."

4.文章结构与组织 Your essay has a basic structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, there is room for improvement in terms of organization and coherence. To enhance your essay's organization, consider using clear topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph and ensure that each paragraph focuses on one specific point.

Example 1: For your second paragraph, you could start with a topic sentence like this: "The lecturer challenges the reading's claim about sea currents not flowing towards Madagascar by providing evidence from computer models."

Example 2: For your third paragraph, you could use a topic sentence like this: "The lecturer refutes the reading's argument that animals would not survive the long journey by explaining the concept of torpor."

5. 语法批改

In the reading material, Recently,recently, there has been a debate on whether the ancestor species cross 400kilometercrossed 400 kilometers by riding debris. Specifically, the reading suggests that this idea is impossible, while the listening material identifies flowsflaws in the reading. First of all, the author states that land animals cross the ocean by accident. They may be swept into the water by big storm. What's more, there are several species make crossing-together.crossings together. In contrast, the lecturer refutes this idea. There arewere just four ancestor animals crossthat crossed the ocean. In fact, among 40 million years, it is possible for species to cross the ocean. Secondly, the author mentions that Africa mainland does not have flow toward Madagascar. In this case, there are no currentcurrents to carry the species to Madagascar. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the author's belief. According to computer model,models, the location of Madagascar was different from present. Madagascar was toward the Africa mainland. Therefore, there definitely had sea currentcurrents a long time ago. Finally, the author alleges that 400 kilometerkilometers was too far to survivalsurvive for species. There were nearly 3three weeks for animals without any food and water. The lecturer, however, takes issue with the claim. theseThese species would not die because they can slow their metabolismmetabolism, named torpor. ThereforeTherefore, these animalanimals did not eat anything in this long time trip.

Section Title: 6.文章修订

The reading passage casts doubt on the popular theory that the ancestors of Madagascar's unique mammals crossed the 400-kilometer ocean by riding debris, while the lecture counters these arguments and supports the theory.

Firstly, the reading asserts that land mammals crossing oceans is a rare accident and requires several individuals of the same species to make the crossing together, making it implausible for Madagascar's diverse mammalian fauna to have originated this way. However, the lecture refutes this by stating that recent genetic research shows all current mammal species on Madagascar descended from just four ancestor species. This means only four successful crossings were needed over 40 million years, making it a more plausible occurrence.

Secondly, the reading claims that sea currents near mainland Africa do not flow towards Madagascar, thus preventing animals from reaching the island even if they were floating on debris. In contrast, the lecture points out that computer models show Africa and Madagascar were further south millions of years ago when these crossings occurred. At that location, sea currents flowed differently and could have carried animals towards Madagascar.

Lastly, the reading argues that a 400-kilometer journey would take too long for animals to survive without food or freshwater sources. The lecture counters this by explaining that some mammals can enter a state called torpor, in which they slow down their metabolism and do not need to eat or drink. Since many mammals on Madagascar belong to groups capable of entering torpor, it is likely their ancestors could have survived such a long journey without sustenance. (261 words)

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Secondly, the reading claims that sea currents near mainland Africa do not flow towards Madagascar, thus preventing animals from reaching the island even if they were floating on debris (changed "Africa mainland does not have flow toward Madagascar" to "sea currents near mainland Africa do not flow towards Madagascar" for clarity). In contrast, the lecture points out that computer models show Africa and Madagascar were further south millions of years ago when these crossings occurred. At that location, sea currents flowed differently and could have carried animals towards Madagascar.

Lastly, the reading argues that a 400-kilometer journey would take too long for animals to survive without food or freshwater sources (rephrased sentence for better structure). The lecture counters this by explaining that some mammals can enter a state called torpor (added explanation of torpor), in which they slow down their metabolism and do not need to eat or drink. Since many mammals on Madagascar belong to groups capable of entering torpor, it is possible for species to cross the ocean. ¶ Secondly, the author mentions that Africa mainland does not have flow toward Madagascar. In this case, there are no current to carry the species to Madagascar. On the contrary, the lecturer refutes the author’s belief. According to computer model, the location of Madagascar was different from present. Madagascar was toward the Africa mainland. Therefore, there definitely had sea current likely their ancestors could have survived such a long time ago. ¶ Finally, the author alleges that 400 kilometer was too far to survival for species. There were nearly 3 weeks for animals journey without any food and water. The lecturer, however, takes issue with the claim. these species would not die because they can slow their metabolism named torpor. Therefore these sustenance (changed "these animal did not eat anything in this long time trip.trip" to "their ancestors could have survived such a long journey without sustenance" for better sentence structure).

8. Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Reading passage doubts
  • Lecture counters and supports theory

• Point 1: Rarity of ocean crossings

  • Reading: Rare accident, multiple individuals needed
  • Lecture: Genetic research, only four ancestor species

• Point 2: Sea currents not favorable

  • Reading: Currents do not flow towards Madagascar
  • Lecture: Africa and Madagascar further south, different currents in the past

• Point 3: Survival during long journey

  • Reading: No food or freshwater sources for survival
  • Lecture: Mammals capable of entering torpor

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