TOEFL TPO -1 Writing Task 1 Sample: Summarize the points made in the lecture you just heard, explaining how they cast doubt on the specific theories discussed in the reading passage.

1.Sub Scores

• Task fulfillment: 4

• Organization: 3

• Coherence and Cohesion: 3

• Language Use: 3

2.Estimated Scores

• Estimated Score: 22

3.Task completeness The essay addresses the specific requirements of the task, summarizing the points made in the lecture and explaining how they cast doubt on the theories discussed in the reading passage. However, there is room for improvement in terms of clarity and detail. To improve task fulfillment, make sure to clearly state the main points from both the reading and listening passages and provide more specific examples to support your argument.

Example 1: Original: "However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that at 200 million years ago, when there was not many tree there to trap the insect in order to form fossils so the missing of bees' fossil is normal." Improved: "The lecturer counters this argument by stating that 200 million years ago, there were fewer resin-producing trees available to trap insects and create fossils. This could explain why bee fossils from that time are scarce."

Example 2: Original: "In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author's another reason that bees are pollen-dependent, they can not surive without food in the acient time - there is no flower..." Improved: "Additionally, the lecturer challenges the author's claim that bees could not have survived without flowering plants by pointing out that bees can also obtain nutrition from other sources such as honeydew produced by certain coniferous trees."

4.Essay structure and organization The essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion. However, it could benefit from better organization within each paragraph and clearer transitions between ideas. To improve organization and coherence, ensure each paragraph focuses on a single point with supporting details and use clear transition words or phrases.

Example 1: Original: "First and foremost, the autor argues that the oldest fossil of bees founded was formed 100 million years ago, while fossils of other species formed 100 millions years older are abandent." Improved: "Firstly, the author claims that the oldest known bee fossil is only 100 million years old, whereas fossils of other species from 200 million years ago are abundant."

Example 2: Original: "Finally, the author's third reason that the acient bees are not the same species as the modern ones due to the discrepancies bettwen them is also counted by the lecturer who points out..." Improved: "Lastly, the lecturer refutes the author's assertion that ancient and modern bees are different species due to discrepancies in their beehive structures. The lecturer explains that both ancient and modern beehives belong to the same species but have evolved over time to adapt to their environments."

5. Grammar

In the reading material, the author cites three reasons to support the viewpoint that there is no major evdianceevidence(misspelling) can indicate bees do exist 200 million years ago. Nevertheless, the lecturer in the listening material argues that it is faulty to deny the existence of bees 200 million ago by limited fossils and lack inglac king(misspelling) of evdienceevidence(misspelling). First and foremost, the autoractor(misspelling) argues that the oldest fossil of bees founded was formed 100 million years ago, while fossils of other species formed 100 millions years older are abandentabandon(misspelling). However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that at 200 million years ago, when there was not many treemany trees(Possible agreement error: 'many/several/few' + singular countable noun) there to trap the insect in order to form fossils so the missing of bees' fossil is normal. In addition, the lecturer casts doubt on the author's another reason that bees are pollen-dependent, they can not surivesurvive(misspelling) without food in the acientancient(misspelling) time - there is no flower, demonstraingdemonstrating(misspelling) that flowers are not the only supply of their food, so are trees, like pin tree that can produce a kind of honey that sufficentsufficient(misspelling) for bees. Finally, the author's third reason that the acientancient(misspelling) bees are not the same species as the modern ones due to the discrepancies bettwenbetween(misspelling) them is also counted by the lecturer who points out that the reason the acidentaccident(misspelling) ones has different orgnizationorganization(misspelling) and structure compared to the bees noadaysnowadays(misspelling) is they have to evolve to adapt the environment to surivesurvive(misspelling), both them are the same species but only in different evolution stages.

6.Revised Essay

In the reading passage, the author presents three arguments to support the claim that there is insufficient evidence to prove the existence of bees 200 million years ago. However, the lecturer in the listening passage contends that using limited fossil records and a lack of evidence to deny their existence is flawed.

Firstly, the author asserts that the oldest known bee fossil is only 100 million years old, while fossils of other species from 200 million years ago are abundant. In contrast, the lecturer counters this argument by stating that 200 million years ago, there were fewer resin-producing trees available to trap insects and create fossils. This could explain why bee fossils from that time are scarce.

Additionally, the lecturer challenges the author's claim that bees could not have survived without flowering plants due to their pollen-dependency. The lecturer points out that bees can also obtain nutrition from other sources such as honeydew produced by certain coniferous trees like pines and oaks. This suggests that bees do not solely rely on flowering plants for sustenance and energy.

Lastly, the lecturer refutes the author's assertion that ancient and modern bees are different species due to discrepancies in their beehive structures. The lecturer explains that chemical analyses of fossilized beehives have revealed both ancient and modern beehives belong to the same species but have evolved over time to adapt to their environments. This demonstrates that despite differences in organization and structure between ancient and modern beehives, they are products of evolutionary adaptations within a single species.

The lecture effectively casts doubt on each of the author's arguments by providing alternative explanations for missing bee fossils, sources of nutrition for ancient bees, and similarities between ancient and modern beehive structures. (289 words)

7.Essay Grading

In the reading material, passage, the author cites presents three reasons arguments to support the viewpoint claim that there is no major evdiance can indicate bees do exist insufficient evidence to prove the existence of bees 200 million years ago. Nevertheless, ago (clearly stating the author's main point). However, the lecturer in the listening material argues that it passage contends that using limited fossil records and a lack of evidence to deny their existence is faulty to deny the existence of bees 200 million ago by limited fossils and lack ing of evdience. ¶ First and foremost, the autor argues flawed (summarizing the lecturer's main argument).

Firstly, the author asserts that the oldest known bee fossil of bees founded was formed is only 100 million years ago, old, while fossils of other species formed 100 millions from 200 million years older ago are abandent. However, the lecturer offers an opposite stand that at abundant (providing context for the first argument). In contrast, the lecturer counters this argument by stating that 200 million years ago, when there was were fewer resin-producing trees available to trap insects and create fossils (offering an alternative explanation for missing bee fossils). This could explain why bee fossils from that time are scarce (connecting explanation to original claim).

Additionally, the lecturer challenges the author's claim that bees could not many tree there to trap the insect have survived without flowering plants due to their pollen-dependency (introducing a counterargument). The lecturer points out that bees can also obtain nutrition from other sources such as honeydew produced by certain coniferous trees like pines and oaks (providing specific examples of alternative food sources). This suggests that bees do not solely rely on flowering plants for sustenance and energy (connecting counterargument to original claim).

Lastly, the lecturer refutes the author's assertion that ancient and modern bees are different species due to discrepancies in order to form fossils so the missing of bees' fossil is normal. ¶ In addition, the lecturer their beehive structures (presenting another counterargument). The lecturer explains that chemical analyses of fossilized beehives have revealed both ancient and modern beehives belong to the same species but have evolved over time to adapt to their environments (providing evidence supporting counterargument). This demonstrates that despite differences in organization and structure between ancient and modern beehives, they are products of evolutionary adaptations within a single species (connecting counterargument to original claim).

The lecture effectively casts doubt on each of the author's another reason that bees are pollen-dependent, they can not surive without food in the acient time - there is no flower, demonstraing that flowers are not the only supply of their food, so are trees, like pin tree that can produce a kind of honey that sufficent for bees. ¶ Finally, the author's third reason that the acient bees are not the same species as the arguments by providing alternative explanations for missing bee fossils, sources of nutrition for ancient bees, and similarities between ancient and modern ones due to the discrepancies bettwen them is also counted by the lecturer who points out that the reason the acident ones has different orgnization and structure compared to the bees noadays is they have to evolve to adapt the environment to surive, both them are the same species but only in different evolution stages.beehive structures (summarizing how the lecture challenges the reading passage).

8.Mind Map

• Introduction

  • Reading passage: insufficient evidence for bees' existence 200 million years ago
  • Listening passage: counters the reading passage's arguments

• Argument 1: Oldest bee fossil

  • Reading: oldest fossil is only 100 million years old
  • Listening: fewer resin-producing trees available to create fossils at that time

• Argument 2: Bees' pollen-dependency and food sources

  • Reading: bees could not survive without flowering plants
  • Listening: bees can obtain nutrition from honeydew produced by coniferous trees

• Argument 3: Ancient and modern beehive structures

  • Reading: discrepancies suggest different species
  • Listening: chemical analyses show evolutionary adaptations within a single species

9.Key Words